ZY
秀才
Joined: 20 Feb 2007
Posts: 163
Location: 台北
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 Posted: 2007-03-04 15:58:40 Post subject: 或许 |
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再次打理行囊角落藏匿的面孔
反覆行过的命题蔓生卷曲的须藤
我应当或许用些心在鬓上裁剪极光下的浮冰
昨日的月色继续旁若无人地偷窃景物
自然喽书页里的蚁群已穿破北回归线
危摇地一只孤独的蛾蛹悬挂在熄去多年的烛盏
我应当或许删抹手记边缘浅眠的许多眼睛
今夜阵雨依然专注拆卸几张蓝图上的经纬线
是什么鸟鸣声此际切断记忆的水声
哎哎杂草自从走近复走远后，那些碑石都只相互捡拾著日影
我应当或许砸碎那方缺水的砚石、坐化成一张宣纸的精魅
明日，岁晚的星河将向卵石浅滩上的渡船不停以腹语诘问
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白水
大学士
Joined: 02 Oct 2006
Posts: 14102
Location: TORONTO
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| Posted: 2007-03-04 19:56:48 Post subject: |
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| 诗行描述出美丽的画面, 道出淡淡的思念 |
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郦楹
童生
Joined: 28 Feb 2007
Posts: 39
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| Posted: 2007-03-05 06:07:30 Post subject: |
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| 颇曲折的意向转换：） |
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赵福治
探花
Joined: 30 May 2006
Posts: 3456
Location: 中国北京
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| Posted: 2007-03-05 07:05:17 Post subject: |
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| 意象密集，读来不畅。浅见。 |
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ZY
秀才
Joined: 20 Feb 2007
Posts: 163
Location: 台北
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| Posted: 2007-03-05 18:13:46 Post subject: |
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多謝三位評讀.繼續學習與實驗中.
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