自然风 童生
Joined: 20 Feb 2009 Posts: 53
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Posted: 2009-04-02 04:41:30 Post subject: 七绝. 春风 |
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七绝. 春风
才吻寒梅桃李娇,
又缠羞月小竹摇.
难别神女奇峡梦,
犹恋西湖柳絮飘. |
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白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2009-04-02 18:27:00 Post subject: |
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才吻寒梅桃李娇,
又缠羞月小竹摇.
灵动,拟人 |
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自然风 童生
Joined: 20 Feb 2009 Posts: 53
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Posted: 2009-04-02 23:13:02 Post subject: |
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| 白水 Moonlight wrote: |
才吻寒梅桃李娇,
又缠羞月小竹摇.
灵动,拟人 |
欢迎白水! |
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冰清 同进士出身
Joined: 29 Mar 2007 Posts: 1921
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Posted: 2009-04-06 06:06:55 Post subject: |
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| “吻”“缠”,很传神。 |
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qinghongh 榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007 Posts: 4110
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Posted: 2009-04-06 06:45:54 Post subject: |
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这两字的确用得妙! |
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自然风 童生
Joined: 20 Feb 2009 Posts: 53
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Posted: 2009-04-06 17:27:59 Post subject: |
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原非如此,修改无数,方成这样。有赞誉,微欣慰。
谢了。 |
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自然风 童生
Joined: 20 Feb 2009 Posts: 53
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Posted: 2009-04-06 17:33:18 Post subject: |
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| qinghongh wrote: |
这两字的确用得妙! |
冰清过誉了。一首诗中,能有一二字句增色已是不错了,不敢奢望。
谢谢评点。 |
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自然风 童生
Joined: 20 Feb 2009 Posts: 53
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Posted: 2009-04-06 23:15:27 Post subject: |
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| qinghongh wrote: |
这两字的确用得妙! |
这妙字可受不起哦。
谢谢qinghongh来访! |
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