From the sea

[Lake]

From the sea

Mona Lisa drops
her smile, as you ride
the dashing waves.
Your tresses an African zest.
The equatorial sun has toned your skin,
and before your eyes
pearls lose their sheen.

A water fairy,
you tread the foam, step
onto the red dust land,
as fresh and pure as
a blooming lotus flower.
By the sea,
you glitter.

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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[William Zhou周道模]

和一位美女浪漫地在海滨度周末？
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周道模

[Lake]

美不美，每人审美观不同。谢谢来读。
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[飘月]

Sounds romantic~~~Very beautiful,thanks~~
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[非马]

喜读LAKE 清新的好诗.
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[Lake]

Thanks 飘月and welcome! Please jump in when you feel comfortable.

Cheers
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[Lake]

Thanks Mr Fei Ma for your encouragement. Still working hard.

Regards,

Lake
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[张南城]

试着翻译，请指正。


海


你驾驭波浪的

妩媚，宛如

蒙娜丽莎微笑

落入了我的眼帘



非洲般的激情

荡漾着你的肢体

赤道的阳光

亮丽着你的皮肤

使天下的珍珠

在你面前

黯然失色



你是海的仙女

你脚踏浪沫

步向红土的岸边

清新而纯真的荷花

便盛开了

让海

遍地璀璨

[Lake]

Hello Nancheng,

译文读了多遍，从中可以看出读者是如何解读的，同时我也可从译文中学习。

除了个别地方和英文的原意有些小小的区别，整体上感觉很好。 很喜欢 “你驾驭波浪的/妩媚”。

觉得题目“海”，似乎可再斟酌。这是在一次 poetry/photo competition 中写着玩的，图中是一位来自海边的非洲妇女...

你的译文比原文亮丽， 谢谢你的解读和着色。

Thanks much!

Lake
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[张南城]

[Lake]

Hi Mr. Zhang,

I'm hesitant to point this out for I don't want to interfere with the reader's interpretation and your translation makes good sense (or even better than the original) even if there are a few places which are a bit off with the original. But here's one: "tresses", I meant a lock of long hair, especially a woman's hair.

Thanks for asking.

Lake
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[张南城]