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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 21:30:43    Post subject: 我跛着腿 Reply with quote

我跛着腿
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我跛着腿
走过我的恐惧
每一种可能的恶化都发生了
不可能的,也发生了

我爱恋的群岛在下沉
我摸过的脸,消失在波涛间
有人示意我沉默──其实
我早就倒下了,在希望倒下之前

秃鹫的叫声在山谷回应
惊恐的浆果怦然坠落
只有那只鼢鼠还保持着乐观
忙着把榛子和赖草搬进地洞

天空象蝙蝠一样,倒挂在参宿上
我脚下,面色腊黄的土地在颤抖
一种疯狂的愿望,一种幻觉
被强行寄托在上面

那边,我看到有人在交头接耳地议论
烟头在脸庞间一闪一灭
远处,两座山,移动巨大的阴影
在相互靠拢,商量着出逃的计划
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外一首吧

致D.X.
89,12,6

多好听的声音!
多好看的脸!
你被谁叫走了?
他找你去有什么事情?

你的消失象一次停电
象一次扳道工的失职……
在你消失的一瞬间
我对你产生了爱情!

在黑暗中,我象雪茄一样冥想
用火蜘蛛似的两眼凝望你
你身躯小巧如镫骨,微笑甜美如蜜糖
象苯环一样端庄,又有单质的纯良

窗外,风极力变换声调
在说另一个单口相声
屋檐在傻笑,树在陪笑──
但我却想哭!

多好听的声音!
多好看的脸……
雪片在半空中变成雨滴,加速降落
雨在织它的斜纹布──织!

你被谁叫走了?
他找你去有什么事情?
噢!他们到底把你弄到哪里去了?
比尘埃飘得还远吗?比麸皮还高吗?

我将与我的情敌挽起手来
将你寻找──眼里含着悲愤的泪水!
寻找你比尘埃,比麸皮还自由的头发
寻找你嘴唇上的电,领口里的河狸香!
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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 21:36:05    Post subject: Reply with quote

还是老的。有亲身体验,感触也深,记得半小时就写完了,不是很顺,凑合着读罢。
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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 21:39:27    Post subject: Reply with quote

这个写得很有厚度哦
感触深
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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 21:48:12    Post subject: Reply with quote

第一首很好啊
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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 21:49:25    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢沉木。有待提高。
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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 21:50:02    Post subject: Reply with quote

NOBODY, 看你整天瞎开心, 诗歌写的还真不赖. 顶个
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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 21:56:31    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢白水。职业业余。大家水平高。我是凑热闹。 Laughing
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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 22:17:57    Post subject: Reply with quote

写的厚重,有感情~这样的诗歌该早拿出来给我们欣赏~
祝好~
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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 22:25:31    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢明月。实在差很远。多年来虽然辍笔,但鉴赏力还是在变化,看以前的,多有不顺眼之处。敢拿出来已经是脸皮厚了,哈哈。问好。 Embarassed
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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 22:44:24    Post subject: Reply with quote

nobody wrote:
谢谢明月。实在差很远。多年来虽然辍笔,但鉴赏力还是在变化,看以前的,多有不顺眼之处。敢拿出来已经是脸皮厚了,哈哈。问好。 Embarassed


要你这样说,我的脸皮不是更厚了.总归比我的诗歌强多了~ Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 22:52:05    Post subject: Reply with quote

[quote="半溪明月"]
nobody wrote:

要你这样说,我的脸皮不是更厚了.总归比我的诗歌强多了~ Very Happy


不是谦虚,还真没有你的好。不过,我们俩不用在这里争这第N名了。同厚,同厚。
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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 23:00:12    Post subject: Reply with quote

[quote="nobody"]
半溪明月 wrote:
nobody wrote:

要你这样说,我的脸皮不是更厚了.总归比我的诗歌强多了~ Very Happy


不是谦虚,还真没有你的好。不过,我们俩不用在这里争这第N名了。同厚,同厚。


呵呵,那就不争了.无意争这些,争的都没有意思~ Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 23:04:37    Post subject: Reply with quote

确实不错。
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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 23:20:45    Post subject: Reply with quote

多谢少君。

头可断,血可流,自知之明不可丢。Laughing

月黑风高,回家洗洗睡了。
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PostPosted: 2007-11-18 01:48:41    Post subject: Reply with quote

就看第一首
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PostPosted: 2007-11-18 02:02:40    Post subject: Reply with quote

的确,第一首很好!学习!
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PostPosted: 2007-11-18 17:34:41    Post subject: Reply with quote

秃鹫的叫声在山谷回应
惊恐的浆果怦然坠落

精彩多多,提读!
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PostPosted: 2007-11-18 19:44:04    Post subject: Reply with quote

感谢jemmy, 荷梦,彭世学。大家太客气了,谢谢。
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PostPosted: 2007-11-19 20:03:15    Post subject: Reply with quote

有很多东西是内外的
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PostPosted: 2007-11-19 20:41:26    Post subject: Reply with quote

多谢黑雨滴阅读赐教。
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