| 许蔚 童生
 
 
 Joined: 07 Jan 2007
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-28 17:50:38    Post subject: 自望迄今,连日玩月,忽风起,小窗衰飒,断绪若云,潸然颓然。 |   |  
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				| 自望迄今,连日玩月,忽风起,小窗衰飒,断绪若云,潸然颓然。 
 
 老荷无端空寂寞
 哪得月华了相思
 贞问流水何处去
 影自相随复相留
 9:33
 07.9.29
 钟陵许蔚于唐镇
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		| 晓松 举人
 
  
 Joined: 26 Feb 2007
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				|  Posted: 2007-09-29 20:12:17    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 拜读。欣赏诗的意境,要是能押韵就更好了~ |  | 
	
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		| 许蔚 童生
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2007-10-04 00:09:56    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 嗯,这方面需要琢磨 只是做的时候偷懒,只照顾感觉而没考虑形式了,呵呵
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		| 南北客 童生
 
 
 Joined: 20 Jun 2007
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				|  Posted: 2007-10-04 09:22:45    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 喜欢前两句。 |  | 
	
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		| 许蔚 童生
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2007-10-05 00:01:05    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 呵呵,个人比较喜欢后两句 |  | 
	
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		| 敦智 童生
 
 
 Joined: 18 Jun 2007
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				|  Posted: 2007-10-05 07:53:02    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 老荷无端空寂寞 哪得月华了相思
 好句。欣赏。
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