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 Posted: 2007-07-07 11:13:18 Post subject: some one is getting a divorce tonight |
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some one is getting a divorce tonight
or may I say
two are getting divorced
each one gets one
it takes two to make the word
singular
I do ask
whence
some one is getting a divorce
makes sense in grammar and the world
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Lake
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| Posted: 2007-07-07 19:42:32 Post subject: |
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You always have good titles, 博弈.
"some one is getting a divorce tonight " immediately arouses readers' curiosity or nervousness--who? why? But after reading the poem, you will get an Aha! which differs from your expectation from the title, a pleasant surprise.
You do have keen observation in language which I very much admire.
"I do ask
whence
some one is getting a divorce
makes sense in grammar and the world"
Well, grammatically correct and generally accepted by the world. 
Is "some one" intentionally spelled out like that?
A clever and thoughtful write.
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| Posted: 2007-07-07 20:34:24 Post subject: so the title is good and the writing is so-so? |
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or should I put 'some ones'
in this little piece, 'one' always stands alone by one-self 
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kino
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| Posted: 2007-07-08 17:39:50 Post subject: |
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| the first time i read it, i thought i'd read it before. catching poetry with a catching title.~~~ |
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| Posted: 2007-07-08 18:01:33 Post subject: |
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 it is an interesting poem |
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| Posted: 2007-07-08 22:26:49 Post subject: |
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| the first time i read it, i thought i'd read it before. catching poetry with a catching title.~~~ |
this one was just composed that night for a friend of mine was
in deep thought in signing that paper; I extrapolated it a bit.
like some said: You get to see it here first, and only here in
北美枫.
the bottom line is: do u get it?
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Lake
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| Posted: 2007-07-09 11:42:00 Post subject: |
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My deep empathy
Traverses over the sea
Birds twitter at dawn
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William Zhou周道模
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| Posted: 2007-07-09 18:13:34 Post subject: |
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Learned the poem and your discussion.Thank you!
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| Posted: 2007-07-10 08:46:43 Post subject: |
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咦，这句先前咋儿没看到呢？
Did I say " a pleasant surprise"?
the bottom line is: I think I got it and the poem is thought-provoking.
happy?
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| Posted: 2007-07-11 13:46:14 Post subject: |
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what an interesting crowd  )
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