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Game Over
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PostPosted: 2010-07-07 05:53:14    Post subject: Game Over Reply with quote

Game over

寫完結局後他把眼闔上
自稿裡滑落一枚硬幣──。

硬幣原所在的一頁寫著:
病床被單裡,他已奄奄
一息,聽見有個硬幣跌落地板
滾向門去,聲音,輕輕
門外,有似銀遠去的低吟──。

─最後,掙扎著地心引力,倒下-。

──經過一個小孩
一個銅板,咦?:
下回快死的時候,可以投入遊戲機
免費再來一回合!
他笑笑地離去。
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PostPosted: 2010-07-07 17:41:25    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very Happy Very Happy
怎么像玩老虎机似的。下次先问章鱼哥 Wink
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PostPosted: 2010-07-08 08:24:50    Post subject: Reply with quote

Laughing

人到中年, 發覺人生
不是可以投幣重玩一遍的.
Laughing

"──。" 在这里具有一个动态的象形, 滚着的硬币.
在语意上衔接着三段情节(作者, 作者所著书, 读者(小孩)),
在这一句
"─最后,挣扎着地心引力,倒下-。"
句号变小, 破折号被解构(在破折之中发生的, 所挖掘出来的符号意义).

(关于破折用来做跳脱(修辞语)在今版古典小说水浒传里也用得很多,
水浒传里已经有些现在所为得语言结构的用法, 很有意思的.)

这三个衔接, 如果做为一个小说的开头, 就可以分走三条线, 加上这个文本(为后设)
就是四个轴, 人物穿插各个轴(reference frame), 等等, 题外话了......

"他笑笑地离去。"里的他,
可以是作者他, 作者所著书中的他, 小孩他, 或就是同一人.
死也就是重生.
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PostPosted: 2010-08-01 05:25:05    Post subject: Reply with quote

单纯一些不好么?总觉得想太多的结果没有什么好处……
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