五绝 远帆（汉译英）

[qinghongh]

五绝 远帆

平生沧海志，万里一征帆。
无惧千层浪，遨游天地间。

（译一）
The Remote Boat

All the life a dream to trip vast oceans,
Like a boat ready for thousands of miles away.
If I am not afraid of any wave on the way,
Then I can have freedom to go anywhere under the sky.
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（译二）
The Remote Boat

For vast oceans I yearn,
A boat prepared for a thousand-mile journey.
If I cast my fear of waves away,
Then I am free to set sail to the heavens.

[Lake]

Qinghongh,

Nice one. I like the idea in the poem. Version 2 reads better to me, which conveys the narrator's ambition expecially expressed in L1. I'm not quite sure of "If' and "Then" at the beginning of L3 and L4, which I think can be left out. Just my opinion though.

Happpy New Year!

Lake

PS: title - how about A Sailing Boat?
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[qinghongh]

[王国栋]

精彩不容错过，学习了。
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