游向高原的鱼
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 Posted: 2009-01-29 17:40:44 Post subject: 五律 梅 |
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——和暗香如沁
底事蹙眉开，
嫣然笑入怀。
玉肢欲劲舞，
皓首却低埋。
峻峭驱时去，
风流逐月来。
谁知何故事，
皎皎远尘埃！
下面是暗香如沁的原诗
凉月照梅开，幽香慰我怀。
邀诗枝上舞，抱剑雪中埋。
恩怨随它去，欢欣入梦来。
相看吟到老，莫再惹尘埃！
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qinghongh
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| Posted: 2009-01-29 18:25:04 Post subject: |
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| 唱和俱佳！ |
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暗香如沁
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Joined: 14 Jan 2007
Posts: 885
Location: 北京
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晓松
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| Posted: 2009-01-30 15:24:59 Post subject: |
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| 鱼兄向来善写梅花和薄荷。 “皎皎远尘埃”更是写出了梅的高洁。 欣赏~ |
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游向高原的鱼
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| Posted: 2009-01-31 05:42:46 Post subject: |
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薄荷其实是假的哈。
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连南河
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Location: Toronto
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| Posted: 2009-01-31 13:54:08 Post subject: |
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五绝 感梅
春风得意去,
摇落数枝梅.
远道香如故,
清途碰酒杯.
Jan 31, 2009 Toronto
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白水
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Joined: 02 Oct 2006
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Location: TORONTO
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| Posted: 2009-02-01 17:22:03 Post subject: |
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玉肢欲劲舞，
皓首又低埋。
鱼, 这"又"若改为"却"如何?探讨  |
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王君明
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Posts: 250
Location: 甘肃天水
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| Posted: 2009-02-02 00:02:13 Post subject: |
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欣赏唱和！
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游向高原的鱼
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| Posted: 2009-02-02 04:26:49 Post subject: |
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赞同白水的，“却”用了。
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白云闲人
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| Posted: 2009-02-02 06:54:20 Post subject: |
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唱妙(恩怨随它去,欢欣入梦来)! 和佳(皎皎远尘埃.风流逐月来)!
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