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Posted: 2008-09-14 04:05:16 Post subject: 诗

我想涉过河到对岸写一首秋天的诗河中石头星罗棋布我踏入河中，从一块石头跃向另一块，尽可能落在别人从未用过的石头上秋风，吹我衣，拂我尘我的头发水草般起伏秋水清澈见底，鱼儿游来游去泛起透明的涟漪那些镶在蓝天白云里的石头啊个个圆润，爱不释手我一步三停留，择石仔细得像挑选婚礼的一个词终于渡过河了。我露出笑容回顾河中那条曲折的路径这时，发现有关那首诗所有的词与思都已记不起我想，那诗是留在途中了 (可我，已不能重新再踏入刚才那条河) _________________ 瞠目结舌

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Posted: 2008-09-14 07:51:52 Post subject:

欣赏这样的喻意，盗版一下。起意时想想，这样的景况，溪比河适当。溪水清澈，小鱼儿卖力的舞动沿着溪石边缘奋力窜游踏上溪中的石块，我一步三停留择石，仔细得像挑选婚礼的一个词尽可能落在，别人从未用过的石头上秋风，吹我衣，拂我尘我的头发水草般起伏那些镶在，蓝天白云里的石头个个圆润，坚定勇敢从一块石头，跃向另一块看似杂乱的步伐，有著明确的方向溪声叮咚悦耳，石头星罗棋布我露出笑容，回顾那条曲折的路径把这首诗，崁进记忆 _________________ 可情可理，去捧就真

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Posted: 2008-09-14 08:48:19 Post subject:

写诗的过程很生动，诗忘了也罢~

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Posted: 2008-09-14 14:28:49 Post subject:

建议最后两行不要。很好的寓意。 _________________ 梦的一端是我脉脉的凝视，而另一端是你清澈的眼睛。

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Posted: 2008-09-15 08:12:37 Post subject:

嗯，镶嵌到记忆。。。笑兄好！ _________________ 默默无言处，盈盈一笑间。

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Posted: 2008-09-18 03:03:35 Post subject:

写诗若涉逝川。乘兴而来，兴尽而归。何须铭记于怀？谢阅读。 _________________ 瞠目结舌

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Posted: 2008-09-18 08:24:05 Post subject: 要不，带个相机和小秘

拈花微笑 wrote:

写诗若涉逝川。乘兴而来，兴尽而归。何须铭记于怀？

谢阅读。

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Posted: 2008-09-18 09:27:37 Post subject: 有道理！他背像机，我背小秘。

咋啦！都要内部有字。 _________________ 可情可理，去捧就真

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Posted: 2008-09-21 17:19:47 Post subject:

悠子 wrote:

拈花微笑 wrote:

写诗若涉逝川。乘兴而来，兴尽而归。何须铭记于怀？

谢阅读。

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Posted: 2008-09-21 17:23:06 Post subject:

詩盜喜裸評 wrote:

咋啦！都要内部有字。

俺这几行文字和＂猪八戒背媳妇＂搭得上界么？ Laughing

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Posted: 2008-09-21 17:30:31 Post subject: 這一路衍生下來不都搭著？挺搭呢～

拈花微笑 wrote:

詩盜喜裸評 wrote:

咋啦！都要内部有字。

俺这几行文字和＂猪八戒背媳妇＂搭得上界么？ Laughing

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Posted: 2008-09-22 09:49:13 Post subject:

随意行走，随意收获，随意洒落 _________________ 梦的一端是我脉脉的凝视，而另一端是你清澈的眼睛。

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Posted: 2008-09-22 14:38:43 Post subject: 这么客气干嘛~

拈花微笑 wrote:

悠子 wrote:

拈花微笑 wrote:

写诗若涉逝川。乘兴而来，兴尽而归。何须铭记于怀？

谢阅读。

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