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<血浓雪白>
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PostPosted: 2006-10-22 12:33:53    Post subject: <血浓雪白> Reply with quote



摄影: 和平岛

摄影令人震撼, 临屏而作, 见笑

<血浓雪白>

惊弓? 金弓!
金色的弓箭朝着宇宙
射出
圣母玛利娅头上的光环

我看见了十字
和母亲
清洗血的乌红
用泪水, 用宽容, 用她铭心刻骨的
爱与痛

洗一片苍白
是要
还给人类的一个干净么?

犹大, 刽子手
十字架, 还有渗骨的
铁钉,,,,,,我

等待着
等待六月飞雪, 还
世界一只
纯洁的
眼睛
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赵福治
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PostPosted: 2006-10-23 05:41:59    Post subject: Reply with quote

血浓雪白——好图,好文,好题目。欣赏。
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白水
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PostPosted: 2006-10-24 14:18:41    Post subject: Reply with quote

赵福治 wrote:
血浓雪白——好图,好文,好题目。欣赏。

谢谢了. 有时诗歌是在瞬间迸发出来的. 照片激发的灵感.
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左岸
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PostPosted: 2006-11-02 00:53:03    Post subject: Reply with quote

诗画珠联璧合,大气,时空感强,文字修辞淡雅,典故运用使诗有了一种圣洁之叹。
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迪拜
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PostPosted: 2006-11-02 18:45:35    Post subject: 有气势 Reply with quote

这一首

写的很有气势
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鹤雨
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PostPosted: 2006-11-03 02:49:12    Post subject: 好壮观的摄影作品, Reply with quote

诗歌配的大胆奇幻,丰富的想象,佩服!问好!
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PostPosted: 2006-11-04 04:55:08    Post subject: Reply with quote

左岸, 迪拜, 鹤雨. 谢谢你们的鼓励, 也很喜欢你们的诗歌.
自我感觉这首诗歌前半部分还行, 结尾却不尽人意, 提出来与诗友交流. 自己将来有灵感时也会修改.
问好
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PostPosted: 2006-11-13 05:16:22    Post subject: Reply with quote

改了一点:

<血浓雪白>

惊弓? 金弓!
金色的弓箭朝着宇宙
射出
圣母玛利娅头上的光环

我看见了十字
和母亲
清洗血的乌红
用泪水, 用宽容, 用她铭心刻骨的
爱与痛

洗一片苍白
是要
给人类的一个干净么?

犹大, 刽子手
十字架, 还有渗骨的
铁钉,,,,,,我

等待着
等待六月飞雪, 还
世界一只
纯洁的
眼睛
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和平岛
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PostPosted: 2006-11-13 09:32:00    Post subject: Reply with quote


世界一只
纯洁的
眼睛

这个结束很不错
Very Happy
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了因大兄
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PostPosted: 2006-11-18 20:14:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

想像奇特。问好。
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白水
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PostPosted: 2006-11-29 18:41:13    Post subject: Reply with quote

[quote="和平岛"]还
世界一只
纯洁的
眼睛

这个结束很不错
Very Happy[/quote]
谢谢, 改了
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PostPosted: 2006-11-29 18:41:50    Post subject: Reply with quote

[quote="了因大兄"]想像奇特。问好。[/quote]

谢谢了因大兄. 问好
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