是有缘 秀才
 
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				 Posted: 2008-03-04 20:10:31    Post subject: 三月的爱 (跟悠子学画葫) | 
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				迎春花偷偷地盛开
 
仿佛在一个不经意的夜
 
沉睡了一个冬的气息
 
也悄悄地在阳光下舒展开
 
将冷冻的冰雪化解
 
 
春风吹过冬天里荒凉的田野
 
长出一片片嫩绿的蔬菜
 
湖边的扬柳
 
也诱惑地掀起了长长的裙摆
 
如美丽的少女跳起舞来
 
 
恢复了生机的枝头
 
默默地孕育着缤纷的七彩
 
多情的蜜蜂忘记了冬眠中长久的等待
 
在花丛里飞来忙去地乐开了怀
 
黄鹂鸟的歌声,婉转地说着爱
 
 
 
原玉:
 
 
 
 
 
三月 by 悠子 
 
 
 
我知道,春天一定会来 
 
雨后的柳青鹅黄 
 
是我望眼了一冬的色彩 
 
花的心扉一朵一朵的打开 
 
千里外的冰雪,正悄悄融解 
 
 
临水而立,看春风又渡 
 
花香轻轻漫过烟雨 
 
飘逝的光线穿越低垂的柳丝 
 
岸边窈窕的身影 
 
是谁的景致,若即若离 
 
 
怎样才能,在桃花睡去之前 
 
在某片绿叶的脉络里 
 
和你相遇 
 
递给你盛满春光的玉盏 
 
告诉你,曾经流失的花语 | 
			 
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		红袖添乱 秀才
  
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				 Posted: 2008-03-04 20:45:45    Post subject:  | 
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				有缘这首真是好和~~我喜欢 _________________ 梦的一端是我脉脉的凝视,
 
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		是有缘 秀才
 
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				 Posted: 2008-03-05 04:41:08    Post subject:  | 
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				| 谢谢红袖喜欢。最近看到你老有新作,羡慕的紧。 | 
			 
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		苏茉儿 秀才
 
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				 Posted: 2008-03-05 08:38:32    Post subject:  | 
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				洋洋洒洒,一路春之歌,结果真好看! _________________ 默默无言处,盈盈一笑间。 | 
			 
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		詩盜喜裸評 进士出身
  
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				 Posted: 2008-03-05 11:50:49    Post subject:  | 
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				迎春花开人人爱! _________________ 可情可理,去捧就真 | 
			 
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		悠子 举人
 
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				 Posted: 2008-03-05 12:10:28    Post subject:  | 
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				| 很春天的。 | 
			 
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		呆哥的女人 童生
 
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				 Posted: 2008-03-05 12:40:11    Post subject:  | 
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				恕我直言,
 
 
是有缘君这首固然贴题扣图,但是感觉平淡了一些;景物有点散,抒情也不是很有感染力.好像没有什么点睛之笔. _________________ 人称呆嫂 | 
			 
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		詩盜喜裸評 进士出身
  
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				 Posted: 2008-03-05 17:58:51    Post subject: 这段不错哪~ | 
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				诱惑地掀起了长长的裙摆 
 
如美丽的少女跳起舞来 _________________ 可情可理,去捧就真 | 
			 
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		是有缘 秀才
 
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				 Posted: 2008-03-05 19:30:09    Post subject: Re: 洋洋洒洒,一路春之歌,结果真好看! | 
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	  | 苏茉儿 wrote: | 
	 
	
	  | 洋洋洒洒,一路春之歌,结果真好看! | 
	 
 
 
 
春天,啊,你真好! | 
			 
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		是有缘 秀才
 
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				 Posted: 2008-03-05 19:31:36    Post subject: Re: 迎春花开人人爱! | 
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盗兄,偷偷地摘了几朵了吧? | 
			 
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		是有缘 秀才
 
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				 Posted: 2008-03-05 19:32:25    Post subject: Re: 很春天的。 | 
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添了一星半点。 | 
			 
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		是有缘 秀才
 
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				 Posted: 2008-03-05 19:34:15    Post subject: Re: 恕我直言, ... | 
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玩玩,水平有限,莫笑。谢谢您提的宝贵意见。 | 
			 
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		是有缘 秀才
 
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				 Posted: 2008-03-05 19:37:07    Post subject: Re: 这段不错哪~ | 
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	  | 詩盜喜裸評 wrote: | 
	 
	
	  诱惑地掀起了长长的裙摆 
 
如美丽的少女跳起舞来 | 
	 
 
 
 
春风让春更迷人心态 | 
			 
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		爱爱 秀才
 
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				 Posted: 2008-03-05 19:38:05    Post subject:  | 
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				迎春花偷偷地盛开 
 
哈~~喜欢~~
 
偷偷的摘一朵~ | 
			 
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		詩盜喜裸評 进士出身
  
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				 Posted: 2008-03-05 19:38:57    Post subject: 您随意!俺干杯~为了今天的寿星、瘦星!还有我这个兽心~ | 
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 _________________ 可情可理,去捧就真 | 
			 
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		苏茉儿 秀才
 
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				 Posted: 2008-03-05 19:42:47    Post subject: Re: 您随意!俺干杯~为了今天的寿星、瘦星!还有我这个兽心~ | 
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哈哈,好啦,诗盗班长,也谢谢你。再顿首!各位玩好,茉儿梦去了。 _________________ 默默无言处,盈盈一笑间。 | 
			 
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