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				|  Posted: 2008-03-04 20:10:31    Post subject: 三月的爱 (跟悠子学画葫) |   |  
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				| 迎春花偷偷地盛开 仿佛在一个不经意的夜
 沉睡了一个冬的气息
 也悄悄地在阳光下舒展开
 将冷冻的冰雪化解
 
 春风吹过冬天里荒凉的田野
 长出一片片嫩绿的蔬菜
 湖边的扬柳
 也诱惑地掀起了长长的裙摆
 如美丽的少女跳起舞来
 
 恢复了生机的枝头
 默默地孕育着缤纷的七彩
 多情的蜜蜂忘记了冬眠中长久的等待
 在花丛里飞来忙去地乐开了怀
 黄鹂鸟的歌声,婉转地说着爱
 
 
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 三月 by 悠子
 
 我知道,春天一定会来
 雨后的柳青鹅黄
 是我望眼了一冬的色彩
 花的心扉一朵一朵的打开
 千里外的冰雪,正悄悄融解
 
 临水而立,看春风又渡
 花香轻轻漫过烟雨
 飘逝的光线穿越低垂的柳丝
 岸边窈窕的身影
 是谁的景致,若即若离
 
 怎样才能,在桃花睡去之前
 在某片绿叶的脉络里
 和你相遇
 递给你盛满春光的玉盏
 告诉你,曾经流失的花语
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		| 红袖添乱 秀才
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-04 20:45:45    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 有缘这首真是好和~~我喜欢 _________________
 梦的一端是我脉脉的凝视,
 而另一端是你清澈的眼睛。
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		| 是有缘 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-05 04:41:08    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 谢谢红袖喜欢。最近看到你老有新作,羡慕的紧。 |  | 
	
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		| 苏茉儿 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-05 08:38:32    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 洋洋洒洒,一路春之歌,结果真好看! _________________
 默默无言处,盈盈一笑间。
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		| 詩盜喜裸評 进士出身
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-05 11:50:49    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 迎春花开人人爱! _________________
 可情可理,去捧就真
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		| 悠子 举人
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-05 12:10:28    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 很春天的。 |  | 
	
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		| 呆哥的女人 童生
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-05 12:40:11    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 恕我直言, 
 是有缘君这首固然贴题扣图,但是感觉平淡了一些;景物有点散,抒情也不是很有感染力.好像没有什么点睛之笔.
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		| 詩盜喜裸評 进士出身
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-05 17:58:51    Post subject: 这段不错哪~ |   |  
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				| 诱惑地掀起了长长的裙摆 如美丽的少女跳起舞来
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		| 是有缘 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-05 19:30:09    Post subject: Re: 洋洋洒洒,一路春之歌,结果真好看! |   |  
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	  | 苏茉儿 wrote: |  
	  | 洋洋洒洒,一路春之歌,结果真好看! |  
 春天,啊,你真好!
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		| 是有缘 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-05 19:31:36    Post subject: Re: 迎春花开人人爱! |   |  
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 盗兄,偷偷地摘了几朵了吧?
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		| 是有缘 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-05 19:32:25    Post subject: Re: 很春天的。 |   |  
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 添了一星半点。
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		| 是有缘 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-05 19:34:15    Post subject: Re: 恕我直言, ... |   |  
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 玩玩,水平有限,莫笑。谢谢您提的宝贵意见。
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		| 是有缘 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-05 19:37:07    Post subject: Re: 这段不错哪~ |   |  
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	  | 詩盜喜裸評 wrote: |  
	  | 诱惑地掀起了长长的裙摆 如美丽的少女跳起舞来
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 春风让春更迷人心态
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		| 爱爱 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-05 19:38:05    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 迎春花偷偷地盛开 哈~~喜欢~~
 偷偷的摘一朵~
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		| 詩盜喜裸評 进士出身
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-05 19:38:57    Post subject: 您随意!俺干杯~为了今天的寿星、瘦星!还有我这个兽心~ |   |  
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		| 苏茉儿 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-05 19:42:47    Post subject: Re: 您随意!俺干杯~为了今天的寿星、瘦星!还有我这个兽心~ |   |  
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 哈哈,好啦,诗盗班长,也谢谢你。再顿首!各位玩好,茉儿梦去了。
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