是有缘 秀才
Joined: 08 Feb 2008 Posts: 741
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Posted: 2008-02-11 20:08:34 Post subject: 雨做的云,云落的雨 - 和雨清《笺》 |
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雨燕寻飞苦,
清溪引我忧。
白云岭上去,
一落又空愁。
原玉:
[五言] 笺 by 雨清
尝知离别苦,
不忍作君忧。
自取相思去,
为君了千愁。 |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2008-02-12 00:12:08 Post subject: |
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伤感尽显 |
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他乡客 秀才
Joined: 03 Jan 2007 Posts: 487 Location: 加拿大.渥汰华 (Ottawa, Canada) 他乡客Collection |
Posted: 2008-02-12 19:48:26 Post subject: |
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恕雨清的原玉是发自内心的声音,读起来铿锵有力,动人心弦。是难得的佳作。 |
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是有缘 秀才
Joined: 08 Feb 2008 Posts: 741
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Posted: 2008-02-13 14:42:04 Post subject: |
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谢莹雪君赏读. |
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是有缘 秀才
Joined: 08 Feb 2008 Posts: 741
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Posted: 2008-02-13 14:43:26 Post subject: |
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他乡客 wrote: |
恕雨清的原玉是发自内心的声音,读起来铿锵有力,动人心弦。是难得的佳作。 |
谢谢他乡客发表读后感. |
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晓松 举人

Joined: 26 Feb 2007 Posts: 1192
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Posted: 2008-02-13 19:57:00 Post subject: |
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两首都不错。标题也别致,好像有首歌叫天上有朵雨做的云~ |
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是有缘 秀才
Joined: 08 Feb 2008 Posts: 741
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Posted: 2008-02-13 21:24:44 Post subject: |
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晓松 wrote: |
两首都不错。标题也别致,好像有首歌叫天上有朵雨做的云~ |
多谢晓松欣赏。 |
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冰清 同进士出身
Joined: 29 Mar 2007 Posts: 1921
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Posted: 2008-02-20 13:03:33 Post subject: |
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两首都好! |
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是有缘 秀才
Joined: 08 Feb 2008 Posts: 741
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Posted: 2008-02-20 16:30:13 Post subject: |
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谢冰清美言。问好。 _________________ 蜻蜓点水非无意 愁云化雨是有情 |
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