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七律<晓梦>

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白水
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Posted: 2007-09-07 19:13:44 Post subject: 七律<晓梦>

七律<晓梦>

步韵和征尘载袖

雾漫西楼晓梦初, 桑田酹酒掷青壶.
气绝海子文章尽, 才断江郎纸笔疏.
月下莺眠清韵杳, 花前叶落色香无.
神仙不问人间事, 笑染朝霞赤墨涂.

征尘载袖原玉:

征尘载袖 wrote:

七律

危楼伫立晚晴初，对酒轻孤望玉壶。
因语凉荷残浴尽，将思败柳老条疏。
莺归巢废音音杳，燕去楼空字字无。
徒有墨毫悬半夜，此情难拾一糊涂。

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Posted: 2007-09-07 19:32:17 Post subject:

婉转不失大气。

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Posted: 2007-09-08 02:44:46 Post subject:

姐姐，我先去FB，回头再和哈^_^ _________________

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Posted: 2007-09-08 08:14:20 Post subject:

乱山何许晕华初，梦蝶悠飏佐酒壶。潇洒情怀风月倦，英豪气宇燕莺疏。竹兰梅菊皆幽淡，春夏秋冬总若无。刷泪芳菲问时聚，拥来虚籁露风涂。 ^_^ _________________

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Posted: 2007-09-08 08:16:29 Post subject:

唱和俱佳! 婉雅中秀气叠叠,挥洒里才气纵横! 向白水,征尘载袖两位学习了! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

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Posted: 2007-09-08 17:25:23 Post subject:

征尘载袖 wrote:

姐姐，我先去FB，回头再和哈^_^

什么是FB啊?

白水
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Posted: 2007-09-08 17:27:33 Post subject:

征尘载袖 wrote:

乱山何许晕华初，梦蝶悠飏佐酒壶。
潇洒情怀风月倦，英豪气宇燕莺疏。
竹兰梅菊皆幽淡，春夏秋冬总若无。
刷泪芳菲问时聚，拥来虚籁露风涂。

^_^

MM好和, 谢过.

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Posted: 2007-09-08 17:28:43 Post subject:

白云闲人 wrote:

唱和俱佳! 婉雅中秀气叠叠,挥洒里才气纵横! 向白水,征尘载袖两位学习了!

问好白云, 还是请你多指点才是 Very Happy

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Posted: 2007-09-08 17:30:46 Post subject:

唱和都好。

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Posted: 2007-09-08 18:50:12 Post subject:

两位才女的唱和俱佳，思路十分开阔畅达。尤其喜欢白水的“笑指朝霞赤墨涂“和证尘的“梦蝶悠扬佐酒壶“两句诗，它们分别起到了点题和照应的作用。学习了。 _________________ ++++++++++++++ 喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰

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Posted: 2007-09-09 02:06:25 Post subject:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

征尘载袖 wrote:

姐姐，我先去FB，回头再和哈^_^

什么是FB啊?

姐姐，FB就是腐败啊^_^
_________________

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Posted: 2007-09-09 02:06:51 Post subject:

谢谢黄老师^_^ _________________

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Posted: 2007-09-09 05:50:41 Post subject:

征尘载袖 wrote:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

什么是FB啊?

姐姐，FB就是腐败啊^_^

高! 令人不得不佩服！

白水
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Posted: 2007-09-09 07:01:16 Post subject:

谢谢莹雪, 黄老师.

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Posted: 2007-09-09 07:04:59 Post subject:

晓松 wrote:

征尘载袖 wrote:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

什么是FB啊?

姐姐，FB就是腐败啊^_^

高! 令人不得不佩服！

MM, 晓松. 好悟 Very Happy

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Posted: 2007-09-09 19:20:03 Post subject:

FB是网络语言^_^ _________________

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Posted: 2007-09-09 20:31:44 Post subject:

征尘载袖 wrote:

FB是网络语言^_^

MM, JJ很少在网上玩. 下午朋友电话说FB是方什么来着, 我笑晕 Very Happy

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Posted: 2007-09-09 21:30:49 Post subject:

姐姐，你那朋友是因为内急，不好意思直接跟你说把电话挂断^_^ _________________

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Posted: 2007-09-10 04:58:32 Post subject:

征尘载袖 wrote:

姐姐，你那朋友是因为内急，不好意思直接跟你说把电话挂断^_^

就这样

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Posted: 2007-09-10 14:15:12 Post subject: Re: 七律<晓梦>

白水 Moonlight wrote:

七律<晓梦>

步韵和征尘载袖

雾漫西楼晓梦初, 桑田酹酒掷青壶.
气绝海子文章尽, 才断江郎纸笔疏.
月下莺眠清韵杳, 花前叶落色香无.
神仙不问人间事, 笑染朝霞赤墨涂.

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神仙不问人间事, 笑染朝霞赤墨涂.

绝了！

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