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白水
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PostPosted: 2007-09-07 19:13:44    Post subject: 七律<晓梦> Reply with quote
七律<晓梦>

步韵和征尘载袖

雾漫西楼晓梦初, 桑田酹酒掷青壶.
气绝海子文章尽, 才断江郎纸笔疏.
月下莺眠清韵杳, 花前叶落色香无.
神仙不问人间事, 笑染朝霞赤墨涂.

征尘载袖原玉:

征尘载袖 wrote:
七律

危楼伫立晚晴初，对酒轻孤望玉壶。
因语凉荷残浴尽，将思败柳老条疏。
莺归巢废音音杳，燕去楼空字字无。
徒有墨毫悬半夜，此情难拾一糊涂。
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PostPosted: 2007-09-07 19:32:17    Post subject: Reply with quote
婉转不失大气。
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PostPosted: 2007-09-08 02:44:46    Post subject: Reply with quote
姐姐，我先去FB，回头再和哈^_^
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PostPosted: 2007-09-08 08:14:20    Post subject: Reply with quote
乱山何许晕华初，梦蝶悠飏佐酒壶。
潇洒情怀风月倦，英豪气宇燕莺疏。
竹兰梅菊皆幽淡，春夏秋冬总若无。
刷泪芳菲问时聚，拥来虚籁露风涂。

^_^
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PostPosted: 2007-09-08 08:16:29    Post subject: Reply with quote
唱和俱佳! 婉雅中秀气叠叠,挥洒里才气纵横! 向白水,征尘载袖两位学习了!
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笛里关山.
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PostPosted: 2007-09-08 17:25:23    Post subject: Reply with quote
征尘载袖 wrote:
姐姐，我先去FB，回头再和哈^_^


什么是FB啊? Wink
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PostPosted: 2007-09-08 17:27:33    Post subject: Reply with quote
征尘载袖 wrote:
乱山何许晕华初，梦蝶悠飏佐酒壶。
潇洒情怀风月倦，英豪气宇燕莺疏。
竹兰梅菊皆幽淡，春夏秋冬总若无。
刷泪芳菲问时聚，拥来虚籁露风涂。

^_^


MM好和, 谢过. Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2007-09-08 17:28:43    Post subject: Reply with quote
白云闲人 wrote:
唱和俱佳! 婉雅中秀气叠叠,挥洒里才气纵横! 向白水,征尘载袖两位学习了!


问好白云, 还是请你多指点才是 Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2007-09-08 17:30:46    Post subject: Reply with quote
唱和都好。
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PostPosted: 2007-09-08 18:50:12    Post subject: Reply with quote
两位才女的唱和俱佳，思路十分开阔畅达。尤其喜欢白水的“笑指朝霞

赤墨涂“和证尘的“梦蝶悠扬佐酒壶“两句诗，它们分别 起到了 点题和

照应的作用。学习了。
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PostPosted: 2007-09-09 02:06:25    Post subject: Reply with quote
白水 Moonlight wrote:
征尘载袖 wrote:
姐姐，我先去FB，回头再和哈^_^


什么是FB啊? Wink


姐姐，FB就是腐败啊^_^
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PostPosted: 2007-09-09 02:06:51    Post subject: Reply with quote
谢谢黄老师^_^
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PostPosted: 2007-09-09 05:50:41    Post subject: Reply with quote
征尘载袖 wrote:
白水 Moonlight wrote:
什么是FB啊? Wink


姐姐，FB就是腐败啊^_^


高! 令人不得不佩服！
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PostPosted: 2007-09-09 07:01:16    Post subject: Reply with quote
谢谢莹雪, 黄老师.
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PostPosted: 2007-09-09 07:04:59    Post subject: Reply with quote
晓松 wrote:
征尘载袖 wrote:
白水 Moonlight wrote:
什么是FB啊? Wink


姐姐，FB就是腐败啊^_^


高! 令人不得不佩服！


MM, 晓松. 好悟 Very Happy Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2007-09-09 19:20:03    Post subject: Reply with quote
FB是网络语言^_^
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PostPosted: 2007-09-09 20:31:44    Post subject: Reply with quote
征尘载袖 wrote:
FB是网络语言^_^

MM, JJ很少在网上玩. 下午朋友电话说FB是方什么来着, 我笑晕 Very Happy Embarassed
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PostPosted: 2007-09-09 21:30:49    Post subject: Reply with quote
姐姐，你那朋友是因为内急，不好意思直接跟你说把电话挂断^_^
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PostPosted: 2007-09-10 04:58:32    Post subject: Reply with quote
征尘载袖 wrote:
姐姐，你那朋友是因为内急，不好意思直接跟你说把电话挂断^_^

就这样 Rolling Eyes
lover lover
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PostPosted: 2007-09-10 14:15:12    Post subject: Re: 七律<晓梦> Reply with quote
白水 Moonlight wrote:
七律<晓梦>

步韵和征尘载袖

雾漫西楼晓梦初, 桑田酹酒掷青壶.
气绝海子文章尽, 才断江郎纸笔疏.
月下莺眠清韵杳, 花前叶落色香无.
神仙不问人间事, 笑染朝霞赤墨涂.
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神仙不问人间事, 笑染朝霞赤墨涂.

绝了！
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