Maple Review :: View topic - 神龙架之行<一>

	Chinese Literature Society of North America \| Maple Review \| Immigrants in Canada \| Angel Studio \| The Driftwood Artist Society \| Ocean of Poetry \| Island of Music "HuaHe Cup" 2007 Chinese Mainland and Oversea Poetry Competition and Non-governmental Magazines and Newspapers Joint Exhibition starts on the first day of 2007.
	FAQ Search Memberlist Usergroups Register Profile Log in to check your private messages Sign in Blogs Weblogs News Album



Dictionary Check Poems' Rules & Forms Search for Chinese Poems Poetry & Music

Maple Review Home -> 古韵新音

神龙架之行<一>

蠢读斋主人
童生

Joined: 14 Dec 2008
Posts: 26

蠢读斋主人Collection

Posted: 2008-12-31 23:03:57 Post subject: 神龙架之行<一>

题王昭君生在香溪屈子旁,肠柔骨刚两相当. 丹青不低脂粉眉,留得胡天日月长. 题红坪天门垭口冷风吹,五潭细雨断人行. 半山青翠明如洗,晚凉溪喧时闻莺. 红坪姊妹峰三十六峰放眼立,天光半开面目新. 姊妹相依千万年,昭王故事说到今.

黄洋界
探花

Joined: 23 Mar 2007
Posts: 3301
Location: 多伦多,加拿大
黄洋界Collection

Posted: 2009-01-01 05:30:58 Post subject:

<题王昭君>这首写得好,对王昭君进行了恰当的历史评价. 第二,三首连同第一首,皆有不合韵律之处,请酌定. _________________ ++++++++++++++ 喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰

野航
秀才

Joined: 23 Mar 2007
Posts: 547
Location: toronto
野航Collection

Posted: 2009-01-01 05:45:21 Post subject:

词意皆清丽,但音韵不谐.与黄老师同感. _________________ 回归自然回归心灵回归传统

蠢读斋主人
童生

Joined: 14 Dec 2008
Posts: 26

蠢读斋主人Collection

Posted: 2009-01-02 22:35:06 Post subject:

黄洋界,野航先生所评即是.本人不擅音韵,做诗不敢妄标律绝,即事感物,以抒胸臆为快,但觉合心顺口即可.今后希二兄多多指教,使小弟能上一层楼矣.谢谢!

Display posts from previous:

Emoticons





View more Emoticons

Page 1 of 1 View previous topic View next topic

Maple Review Home -> 古韵新音

Once you post your works here, that means you submits them to the magazine of Maple Review (North American Maple, or BeiMeiFeng), a bilingual journal published by Chinese Literature Society of North America. The magazine holds the right to translate them into Chinese, and publish them in both languages. You need to be responsible for the copyright issues of your own files uploaded.
Powered by phpBB © 2001, 2005 phpBB Group
phpBB Chinese interface was translated by iCy-fLaME