又一方天
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 Posted: 2007-02-13 14:48:34 Post subject: [原创]《失 落》之余 |
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《失 落》之余
苍山孤，云淡霭疏。古枝凄雁吟暮。
跌尽一片丹血梦，肠断霞残星酷。
寒烟渡，岸柳觫，霜舟漂泊隐何处?
溪波潜平，短笛寡琴抒，萧音问仄，薄冰钓曲误。
月新出，莫照衰草旧路。浅浅河汉难步。
悠悠岁月逝泪眼，茫茫几叠诗赋。
枭扰闹，风嘶怒，心淘浊浪眼迷雾。
魂丟魄没, 淡却一杯土。收拾自身，寄暾晖朝露。
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白水
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| Posted: 2007-02-13 20:36:37 Post subject: |
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大气透着悲凉, 令人侧目......
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戴玨
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| Posted: 2007-02-14 03:07:34 Post subject: |
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只看句式像是摸魚兒，不過平仄不合。 |
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又一方天
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| Posted: 2007-02-14 14:00:21 Post subject: |
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| 戴玨 wrote: |
| 白水 Moonlight wrote: |
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敢问词牌? |
只看句式像是摸魚兒，不過平仄不合。 |
戴玨看出了,谢谢提醒.
摸魚兒一调九体,我这算第十体吧.
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白水
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| Posted: 2007-02-14 14:29:29 Post subject: |
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| 又一方天 wrote: |
| 戴玨 wrote: |
| 白水 Moonlight wrote: |
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敢问词牌? |
只看句式像是摸魚兒，不過平仄不合。 |
戴玨看出了,谢谢提醒.
摸魚兒一调九体,我这算第十体吧. |
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