游向高原的鱼
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贺圣朝 抒怀 [原创 2008-11-15 11:36:09]
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匆匆过眼飞鸿住，挽弓回头去。偷将苦力作敲推，夜阑心如绪。
蹉跎月日，人来几许？可曾同倾诉？高楼烛影总摇摇，一杯空空处。
依照下面词谱《贺胜朝》
平平仄仄平平仄，仄平平平仄。平平仄仄仄平平，仄平平平仄。
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平平仄仄，平平仄仄。仄平平平仄。平平仄仄仄平平，仄平平平仄。
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下面是过客的原词
酒薄难使留心住，
欲随飞鸿去。
劳人墨客枉寻辞，
费这般思绪。
霜华遍地，诗思几许？
与留骚人诉！
追风坝上驰铁马，
且溶秋浓处。
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白水
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Joined: 02 Oct 2006
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Location: TORONTO
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| Posted: 2008-11-26 13:51:27 Post subject: |
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| 韵味浓郁 |
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冰清
同进士出身
Joined: 29 Mar 2007
Posts: 1921
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| Posted: 2008-11-26 15:10:30 Post subject: |
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| 一气浑成, 好词! |
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白云闲人
探花
Joined: 26 Aug 2007
Posts: 3466
白云闲人Collection |
| Posted: 2008-11-27 06:54:33 Post subject: |
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抒展情怀,唱和同佳!
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诗中岁月,
笛里关山. |
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qinghongh
榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007
Posts: 4110
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| Posted: 2008-11-27 08:21:09 Post subject: |
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| 同感！ |
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又一方天
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Joined: 16 Nov 2006
Posts: 385
又一方天Collection |
| Posted: 2008-11-28 23:38:30 Post subject: |
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步韵作甚佳
问好鱼
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空钩久垂
钓得
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