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淮安桑园路
钓月
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PostPosted: 2008-11-07 17:55:00    Post subject: 淮安桑园路 Reply with quote

提及桑园路
先有一幅意象
定有许多桑树
盘踞在道路两旁
红红桑椹
馋得口水直淌
碧绿桑叶
挂满洁白蚕茧
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不过是根血管
穿过城市心脏
悠闲的行人
飞驰的车辆
上下班时陪我
走一段人生时光
桑园空留其名
我也空留下诗章
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我的慌慌张张
悠悠荡荡
幸福的晕眩
爱恋的光芒
沉重的烦恼
失意的悲伤
路会感觉到
却转眼就会遗忘
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亿万斯年过后
也许成海,也许有桑
雨兀自哗哗地下
风仍然飞飞扬扬
大朵大朵彩霞
大群大群白羊
我和我所爱之人
孰知会在何方
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08年11月于钓月小筑
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PostPosted: 2008-11-07 19:23:58    Post subject: Reply with quote

语言还需要大幅度提炼,多跳跃些就好。
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PostPosted: 2008-11-07 20:57:29    Post subject: Reply with quote

我和我所爱之人
孰知会在何方

弥漫淡淡哀伤。。。
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PostPosted: 2008-11-08 00:51:17    Post subject: Reply with quote

[quote="司马策风"]语言还需要大幅度提炼,多跳跃些就好。[/quote]

谢指点!向你学习了!
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