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钢琴王子——理查德.克莱德曼

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Posted: 2008-07-07 20:30:24 Post subject: 钢琴王子——理查德.克莱德曼

钢琴王子——理查德.克莱德曼 ——司马策风睫毛掩盖的晨梦在绿叶蚕蛹苏醒用一盘冰块的清凉煽动一台玫瑰的温馨指头跳动着神经巧取月光的羽毛你摇头一吹琴键化作白鸽飞高将朵朵古城堡悄悄塞进法国烤箱在摇头晃脑的咒语中推出现代迪斯尼盛宴的芬芳彩音漫舞流萤众生星空中催眠今宵欲往何处你放飞的魔毯 2008，7，5 _________________ 《北美枫》司马策风文集 http://www.maplereview.org/best.php?t=8676

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Posted: 2008-07-08 19:25:27 Post subject:

点评者?! _________________ 《北美枫》司马策风文集 http://www.maplereview.org/best.php?t=8676

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Posted: 2008-07-08 20:06:07 Post subject:

为何要在中间空格?是为了一种符合题目的一种音乐节奏? 这个节奏最好由读者自己来断,不然读起来思绪不连贯~呵呵，我的个见!

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Posted: 2008-07-08 20:37:11 Post subject:

半溪明月 wrote:

为何要在中间空格?是为了一种符合题目的一种音乐节奏?
...

啊,感谢你有心.我的停顿,有时是音节的需要,更是为了强调名词

或者动词所负载的意蕴.停顿,就是不让读者轻易的滑过去.
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Posted: 2008-07-09 17:20:38 Post subject:

交换一二节.请阅评 _________________ 《北美枫》司马策风文集 http://www.maplereview.org/best.php?t=8676

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Posted: 2008-07-09 19:14:40 Post subject:

再读,请阅评 _________________ 《北美枫》司马策风文集 http://www.maplereview.org/best.php?t=8676

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意象斑斓。 _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2008-07-12 05:05:01 Post subject:

清新, 灵动. 我每次听音乐会也会产生写诗歌的冲动, 却始终未敢提笔,主要是担心对音乐的理解不够吧.

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Posted: 2008-07-12 13:49:14 Post subject:

音乐和诗歌一样每个人都有自己的解读.喜欢理查德.克莱德曼的钢琴曲,司马斑斑这首写得很轻盈 _________________ 秀水：省青协会员.在《星星诗刊》《绿风》《诗选刊》《常青藤诗刊》等发表诗歌散文二百余篇。兼写童话。邮箱xshx100@163.com 秀水博客http://blog.sina.com.cn/feizoudeshui

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Posted: 2008-07-12 18:24:13 Post subject:

nobody wrote:

意象斑斓。

多谢你点评.嘿嘿,如此简评,快赶上毛老头的批阅了!

问好一声
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Posted: 2008-07-12 18:45:55 Post subject:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

清新, 灵动.
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白水好,音乐是抽象语言.所以理解起来更是"一千个人就有一千个

哈姆雷特"可随意发挥.诗人别的可能缺乏,惟有想象力不缺.对吗?
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Posted: 2008-07-13 12:17:19 Post subject:

秀水 wrote:

音乐和诗歌一样每个人都有自己的解读.喜欢理查德.克莱德曼的钢琴曲,司马斑斑这首写得很轻盈

多谢秀水来读.感谢你的理解和喜欢.
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Posted: 2008-07-13 14:36:35 Post subject:

用通感——主要用视觉表现听觉，实现丰富的想象力。我不自觉地想到了艾青写小泽征二的诗。 _________________ 诗歌是灵魂的歌唱. 周道模

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William Zhou周道模 wrote:

用通感——主要用视觉表现听觉，实现丰富的想象力。我不自觉地想到了艾青写小泽征二的诗。

感谢周兄点评.的确在表现音乐时候,时常要用到"通感".文字

不能传达声音,但却善于描摹形象.
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