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元月五日,星期五

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Posted: 2007-01-23 04:52:44 Post subject: 元月五日,星期五

1 元月五日，星期五月色寒如水细听一朵花蕾的歌唱深恐，鼻息吹断驰骋的羽翼道声晚安顺便，用一个吻把天使的想象装进冬夜的暖被窝 2 想起那年元月五日，星期五上午，吃过离娘饭坐在蠕动的桑塔纳里补妆车外，有要喜烟喜糖的叫嚷司机，是个男的笑骂:补什么补刚才不哭，不就完了 3 电视上，水手的欢呼热闹着大海复制的歌德堡号，在捡拾三百年前的旧梦遥想，更早的年月应当有个叫纳兰容若的男子骑着战马望月其中，有首小令穿越时空，滑落在电视荧光无法触摸的角落 4 亲近一个电话有醉汉在调侃相好的，别老打我手机咱们好了十多年你电话打多了会被人发觉的啊，刚才没声音?我在电梯里现在车上,一小时后到家 5 一切的声响都打起了呵欠其实，那年今夜曾分成了两半。不过那半为娘亲泪湿的枕巾，早已风干另半夜的欢悦却数年如一日地点亮门前的灯盏

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Posted: 2007-01-23 05:47:23 Post subject:

很好, 还有趣. 最喜欢2. _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2007-01-23 19:03:35 Post subject:

一些小片段很生动 _________________ 为网友服务: 端茶倒水勤打扫!

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Posted: 2007-01-24 06:36:45 Post subject:

只有事，而无诗意。 _________________ 杯中冲浪.披履而行 http://blog.sina.com.cn/shoutao006

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Posted: 2007-01-24 20:52:37 Post subject:

厉害　大有进步　 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

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Posted: 2007-01-24 22:15:35 Post subject:

kokho wrote:

厉害　大有进步　

我觉得也是。
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Posted: 2007-01-25 04:36:19 Post subject:

喜欢这样的诗歌~问好!

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Posted: 2007-01-25 04:38:59 Post subject:

呵呵，我们这里有唱黑脸的，有唱红脸的.不管红脸还是黑脸,都是为了唱好这台戏~

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Posted: 2007-01-26 22:26:27 Post subject:

nobody wrote:

很好, 还有趣. 最喜欢2.

谢谢你的喜欢！

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Posted: 2007-01-26 22:43:58 Post subject:

hepingdao wrote:

一些小片段
很生动

呵呵，一点扰心的片段，一刻点滴的情绪

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Posted: 2007-01-26 23:00:55 Post subject:

杯中冲浪 wrote:

只有事，而无诗意。

谢谢坦言！只是不知怎样才叫诗意？

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Posted: 2007-01-26 23:06:50 Post subject:

kokho wrote:

厉害　大有进步　

你这样说我惭愧得很。其实我并非真正的好诗之人，只不过有时觉得自己需要表达才涂鸦一些，且素来懒惰，不勤不钻，因此接触网络诗歌虽满两年，但进步却谈不上。

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Posted: 2007-01-26 23:14:33 Post subject:

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kokho wrote:

厉害　大有进步　

我觉得也是。

承蒙抬爱。你是与那首九月荷相比吧？那是我十多年前的文字。郁闷的是这两篇在红袖等级都一样呢，同样是B，呵呵！

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Posted: 2007-01-26 23:29:02 Post subject:

半溪明月 wrote:

呵呵，我们这里有唱黑脸的，有唱红脸的.不管红脸还是黑脸,都是为了唱好这台戏~ Very Happy

呵呵，一个论坛要建设好，也许就应该无论唱什么戏的人都有。

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Posted: 2007-01-26 23:46:21 Post subject:

荷梦 wrote:

承蒙抬爱。你是与那首九月荷相比吧？那是我十多年前的文字。郁闷的是这两篇在红袖等级都一样呢，同样是B，呵呵！

怪不得，感觉完全不一样。看来，从风格上，你也走过了一条很多写诗的人走过的路。继续加油！B不B不重要，咱们都是自娱自乐，都不会影响历史进程的。 Laughing

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Posted: 2007-01-29 01:42:55 Post subject:

很高兴大家　都为　荷梦热闹　。。 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

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Posted: 2007-01-30 06:06:14 Post subject:

[quote="nobody怪不得，感觉完全不一样。看来，从风格上，你也走过了一条很多写诗的人走过的路。继续加油！B不B不重要，咱们都是自娱自乐，都不会影响历史进程的。 [/quote] 呵呵，是啊，写这些文字纯粹为了自娱自乐，说到我心坎儿上来了呢！

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Posted: 2007-01-30 06:09:21 Post subject:

kokho wrote:

很高兴大家　都为　荷梦热闹　。。

Cool

看到你这话，荷梦感动，无言。。。

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Posted: 2007-01-30 22:50:52 Post subject:

荷梦 wrote:

kokho wrote:

很高兴大家　都为　荷梦热闹　。。

Cool

看到你这话，荷梦感动，无言。。。

那就多写呀。。。

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Posted: 2007-02-01 02:14:32 Post subject:

写不了的。最近我脑子里常一片空白，连一些随感都不能抒发出来，博客都很长时间没有更新了。更别提写诗了！自己也奇怪，到底怎么啦，心真的老了吗？老到静止了呢！

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