古埙
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《五绝 故乡》
乱石铺大街，天明拾草柴。海风吹陋巷，玉笛绕青槐。
《无题》
小婵初浴面，瘦骨玉蓉胎。一点胭脂色，羞惭老镜台。
鸡虫尊大鼎，雏凤杂凡材。素宇冰轮静，流云自剪裁。 |
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古埙
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| Posted: 2008-06-23 19:30:14 Post subject: |
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戴玨
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| Posted: 2008-06-26 05:42:28 Post subject: |
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第一首第一句平仄不對。
第二首怎麼八句？
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野航
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| Posted: 2008-06-29 11:19:28 Post subject: |
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风格高简.
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回归自然 回归心灵 回归传统 |
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