| 野航 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-10 17:22:11    Post subject: 哀汶川九首(修订稿) |   |  
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				| 哀汶川(5.12-6.12  ) 
 一霎元殃破汶川,天崩地裂碎人间.血埋羌蜀黄泉赤,泪涌江河碧水咸.
 此日三军同救难,他乡孤客独焚烟.何堪断壁残垣里,头枕尸身接雨眠.
 
 青天未解苍生苦,逐客常怀大国忧.纵有胡温能秉正,焉知李杜又生愁.
 山蟠陇陕根皆断,堰塞岷峨水不流.八万同胞堆瓦砾,孤儿寡母痛心揪.
 
 西蜀鹃啼血满天,北川花谢泪盈田.山畦油菜枯难获,城郭儿童半已眠.
 遗孑暂能居绿帐,伤残何以度朱炎.涪江南去还东去,惨影愁云暗白岩.
 
 龙门断裂近成都,斧劈高山剑斫沟.曾叹河崩尸遍野,又惊城破血穿楼.
 疑因贪腐悭钢铁,岂独糊涂怪纸图.多少儿雏同一冢,夜深号泣警当途.
 
 存殁当时一念间,方经劫难见金坚.闾阎儿女今生志,歌舞青春隔世缘.
 断背自君支广厦,残肢为尔拄苍天.卧龙跃马英雄地,一曲哀歌动百川.
 
 元戎坐镇锁愁容,总理飞临泪洒胸.不有躬亲明疾苦,安能急难出英雄.
 哀兵十万来天下,义士千方入震中.掘尽愁城穿死地,废墟深处是吾兄.
 
 红旗不动半低昴,赤县无言悼国殇.五月高原犹带雪,三分黑发可成霜.
 灵山埋骨人虽灭,圣火传薪志自强.民贵君轻千古论,几曾生死系衷肠?
 
 海峡横眉六十春,燃萁煮豆本同根.一朝泪洗青川石,两岸冰销赤子心.
 投币街头怜老丐,倾囊台上咽群星.千年几度金瓯缺,唯有精诚壮国魂.
 
 中华自古多奇祸,裂地倾天有共工.沧海横流存砥柱,青山不老赖真龙.
 炎黄亿叶人寰遍,患难千秋血脉通.怅望神州挥浊泪,扪心痛觉少微功.
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		| 白水 大学士
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-11 16:20:53    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 感人之作. 野航, 真高兴看见你回来. |  | 
	
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		| 他乡客 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-11 17:01:17    Post subject: |   |  
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				| “断背自君支广厦,残肢为尔拄苍天.卧龙跃马英雄地,一曲哀歌动百川.” 
 好诗。真心,真情,功底深厚。佩服。
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		| qinghongh 榜眼
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-11 17:33:31    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 野航好诗。问候。 |  | 
	
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		| 黄洋界 探花
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-12 05:05:32    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 野航归来哀汶川,七首悲歌动地天.问候! _________________
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 喜金石书画,友竹菊梅兰
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		| 野航 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-12 13:10:06    Post subject: 补足八首. |   |  
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				| 龙门断裂近成都,斧劈高山剑戳沟.曾叹河崩尸遍野,又惊城破血穿楼. 疑因贪腐悭钢铁,岂独糊涂怪纸图.多少儿童同一冢,夜深号泣警当途.
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		| 野航 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-12 13:15:01    Post subject: |   |  
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	  | 他乡客 wrote: |  
	  | “断背自君支广厦,残肢为尔拄苍天.卧龙跃马英雄地,一曲哀歌动百川.” ...
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 问好他乡客兄,有机会来多伦多玩,切磋一下.
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		| 野航 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-12 13:19:17    Post subject: |   |  
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	  | 白水 Moonlight wrote: |  
	  | 感人之作. 野航, 真高兴看见你回来. |  
 问好白水,虽不常来,却总惦着这里的朋友.终日碌碌,常自惭愧.
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		| 野航 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-12 17:53:29    Post subject: |   |  
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	  | 黄洋界 wrote: |  
	  | 野航归来哀汶川,七首悲歌动地天.问候! |  
 问好黄老师,今年定要请您喝回酒.
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		| 松云老人 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-12 22:35:06    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 迟赏。 赤子心,老杜笔,警世之作,激赏!
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		| 古埙 童生
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-13 10:50:04    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 能蕴籍些更佳。 |  | 
	
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		| 野航 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-13 19:01:47    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 谢朋友们点评,再加一首,勉强完工. 
 红旗不动半低昴,赤县无言悼国殇.五月高原犹带雪,三分黑发可成霜.
 灵山埋骨人虽灭,圣火传薪志自强.民贵君轻千古论,几曾生死系衷肠?
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		| 白水 大学士
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-13 19:48:36    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 不愧状元, 好文笔, 好意境.再读, 再顶  |  | 
	
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		| 野航 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-14 06:00:18    Post subject: |   |  
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	  | 松云老人 wrote: |  
	  | 迟赏。 赤子心,老杜笔,警世之作,激赏!
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 先生过奖了.
 哀伤在心,不吐难忍.
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		| 古埙 童生
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-14 08:10:04    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 呵呵,过于伤刻,有未稳处。老杜八手,一气贯融,排挞云天;无论那个角度看,皆叹为止观。后人学之,徒存皮毛耳。 |  | 
	
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		| 野航 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-14 14:06:52    Post subject: |   |  
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	  | 古埙 wrote: |  
	  | 呵呵,过于伤刻,有未稳处。老杜八手,一气贯融,排挞云天;无论那个角度看,皆叹为止观。后人学之,徒存皮毛耳。 |  
 说得好啊.我们跟老杜的距离是永远的距离.
 至于皮毛之说,倒是较难接受,我虽能理解你的心思,却不太欣赏你的态度.历来学杜者多如牛毛,唐以后大家何人未曾学杜,岂能说都只得其皮毛?
 拙作不过感时抚事,又怎敢与先圣争上下?
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		| 游向高原的鱼 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-14 16:20:07    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 卧龙跃马英雄地,一曲哀歌动百川. 大地动摇暗旻,野航文采自纵横。
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		| 古埙 童生
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-14 16:20:47    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 人心不古,中道废黜。乐而不淫、哀而不伤,现在谁能真正做到? 差之毫厘、谬以千里;能得皮毛,已然大佳。
 非指野君,盖亦感叹时下之格律诗作也。
 圣不必争、本无可争;贤不必较、亦无可较也。一叹。
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		| 野航 秀才
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-16 14:35:34    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 确有不如意处,还待细细琢磨. _________________
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		| 古埙 童生
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-06-18 20:52:18    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 野兄莫较古埙疏狂,君久不为诗,然气力绝大,稍加用功必侪古人。佩服。 |  | 
	
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