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PostPosted: 2008-05-05 16:47:45    Post subject: 时光   Reply with quote

这些纯属丰富的联想
绝不是时光的真实形象
混沌子夜神神秘秘的老鼠
威风凛凛的山林百兽之王
日出时嬉戏于草地的白兔
阳春时节撒云播雨的神龙
在草木上写着咒语的灵蛇
飞过下午阴阳之界的骏马
午后悠闲自在啃草的山羊
日落西山时飞跃攀援的猿猴
月光下啼唤金乌的精灵
夜幕降临后值司的猎豹
好吃懒做糊里糊涂的金猪
那只远古时代的传奇猛兽
早就风化于荒村野乡
  
时光,行走如风的浪子
边走边玩出眩目花样
将雪花撒向山川河流
大地身披素洁的银装
将砭骨北风加热焙烤
天地间淌过滚滚热浪
将五彩缤纷的色彩乱洒
树木花草美丽漂亮
将迷人的芬芳馈赠
五谷丰捻,田野流香
它拔出拄天的雷钩电剑
劈断无数峰峦叠嶂
为了使大地失血缺水
舀干无数河流池塘
把沉鱼落雁的美女
点上浑身的鸡皮疙瘩
吃光儿时红红的桑椹
桑田化为浩瀚的海洋

挑剔无比的时光记忆
却绝对臣服于你的热望
一面猎猎飘扬的旆帜
成为终生不贰的导向
一生中最虔诚的宗教
襁褓时母亲的乳房
幼年吃过的麦牙糖
至今依旧唇齿留香
一条清晰可见的幽径
蜿蜒通向人间天堂
千里万里的倦归之鸟
永远不嫌归程的遥远漫长
  
今晚,背着沉淀的岁月
跋涉在归乡的泥泞路上
即将敲响的新年钟声
第一次有了大山的重量
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PostPosted: 2008-05-05 19:42:51    Post subject: Reply with quote

语言的表述方式单一了,有点呆板!
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PostPosted: 2008-05-05 23:53:44    Post subject: Reply with quote

写的很密!
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PostPosted: 2008-05-06 05:22:59    Post subject: Reply with quote

二位说的正中这首诗的软肋,谢谢!
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