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恨君恰似江楼月
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PostPosted: 2008-04-28 06:59:59    Post subject: 恨君恰似江楼月 Reply with quote

独自凭栏,不胜寒
我抱紧月光取暖……

一缕一缕梳平
我对你的思念
捏成一串紫色的风铃
垂挂在,我寂寞的窗檐
夜夜迎着风的舞步
盈盈而舞

一纸一纸铺开
我写给你的浅词小令
绣上一朵洁白的茉莉花
轻轻系在,紫色的风铃
夜夜踩着风的韵律
簌簌而歌

你会听到、看到吗?!
辗转徘徊间,一行行凌乱的脚印
踩疼了月影婆娑的薄影
“恨君恰似江楼月
暂满还亏
暂满还亏
待得团圆是几时?”

蜷缩进月儿的怀里
轻声的问
问?
千里共婵娟的距离
有多远?!
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PostPosted: 2008-04-28 10:25:21    Post subject: Reply with quote

很凉很痛的

读完了病情有加重之趋向~

问茉儿好。
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PostPosted: 2008-04-28 16:54:40    Post subject: Reply with quote

很摇很晃的,读完了有头晕目眩的感觉~
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PostPosted: 2008-04-28 17:20:45    Post subject: Reply with quote

感觉要咬咬牙,恨恨那姓江的楼月。
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PostPosted: 2008-04-28 19:20:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

;抱着月亮取暖; 又;恨君恰似江楼月;是不知‘千里共婵娟’有多远 很摇很晃的
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PostPosted: 2008-04-29 05:36:02    Post subject: Reply with quote

古典的,深情的。。。
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PostPosted: 2008-04-29 07:00:40    Post subject: Reply with quote

悠子,你感冒了么,要小心了,希望你快快好起来,已经习惯了读你得每日一诗。

请诗盗先生在百忙之中抽点儿时间,给俺说说您"很摇很晃"的原因。哈!

有缘兄,我们一起咬吧。一个人我有点儿怕。

曲兄您怎么也跟着摇晃啊,这月让茉儿给糟蹋了。RazzP

谢谢梦荷来喝茶,请您常来串门。茉莉花茶都是免费的。嘿嘿嘿嘿!
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PostPosted: 2008-04-29 07:40:36    Post subject: 一帖治百病! Reply with quote

苏茉儿 wrote:
悠子,你感冒了么,要小心了,希望你快快好起来,已经习惯了读你得每日一诗。
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这方子厉害~

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PostPosted: 2008-04-29 14:12:31    Post subject: 茉儿好。这些日子晕的,没有诗意。读你的啦 Reply with quote

苏茉儿 wrote:
悠子,你感冒了么,要小心了,希望你快快好起来,已经习惯了读你得每日一诗。
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PostPosted: 2008-04-29 17:05:23    Post subject: Reply with quote

嗯,古典和现代对话。。。
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PostPosted: 2008-04-29 21:18:18    Post subject: Reply with quote

哎呀 我的重点是分析诗的结构抱月取暖 又恨君恰似江楼月 是不知千里共婵娟 有多远 回到第一句 独自凭栏
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PostPosted: 2008-04-29 21:32:28    Post subject: Reply with quote

说到江北也病了 已经与诗无关了 我借用诗道兄的话 说江北的时病 时下之病 与这里的风气有关了
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PostPosted: 2008-04-30 07:28:15    Post subject: Reply with quote

曲元奇 wrote:
说到江北也病了 已经与诗无关了 我借用诗道兄的话 说江北的时病 时下之病 与这里的风气有关了


哎呀,请曲兄不要多想,就瞎玩么。您开心的玩就好,尽情的说就好。
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PostPosted: 2008-04-30 18:46:01    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢 一切都好
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