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七绝—牡丹

莹雪
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Posted: 2008-04-17 23:35:11 Post subject: 七绝—牡丹

细雨新舒留傲骨，群芳久慕色如霞。并非圣界瑶池子，曾在山间野草花。 “野草花”注：牡丹是我国著名的传统花卉，原为野生植物。

黄洋界
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Posted: 2008-04-18 08:43:32 Post subject:

曾写倾国色，又写兰牡丹，问好。 _________________ ++++++++++++++ 喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰

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Posted: 2008-04-18 16:58:11 Post subject:

山间牡丹，世外散仙。

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Posted: 2008-04-19 00:21:24 Post subject:

黄洋界 wrote:

曾写倾国色，又写兰牡丹，问好。

谢谢黄老点评！问好。

莹雪
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Posted: 2008-04-19 00:23:13 Post subject:

qinghongh wrote:

山间牡丹，世外散仙。

牡丹曾有过的逍遥。问好qinghongGG Razz

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Posted: 2008-04-21 23:35:32 Post subject:

不错.

莹雪
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Posted: 2008-04-22 00:25:46 Post subject:

叶英儿 wrote:

不错.

谢谢英姐点评！问好

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Posted: 2008-04-22 19:20:11 Post subject:

细雨新舒留傲骨，群芳久慕色如霞。好句，学习了。

是有缘
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Posted: 2008-04-22 22:29:16 Post subject:

首二句生动。后二句是不是可以改以下，比如：若非圣界瑶仙子，谁想山间野草花。 _________________ 蜻蜓点水非无意愁云化雨是有情

莹雪
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Posted: 2008-04-23 22:07:47 Post subject:

秋叶 wrote:

细雨新舒留傲骨，群芳久慕色如霞。

好句，学习了。

谢谢您的点评！问好

莹雪
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Posted: 2008-04-23 22:09:23 Post subject:

是有缘 wrote:

首二句生动。后二句是不是可以改以下，比如：
...

嗯，可以考虑。谢谢关注！

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Posted: 2008-04-24 00:34:56 Post subject:

"曾在山间野草花" 方有: "细雨新舒留傲骨" 原生态方为根为本. 一首寓有哲理的诗.

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Posted: 2008-04-24 17:20:23 Post subject:

老山 wrote:

"曾在山间野草花"
方有:
"细雨新舒留傲骨"
原生态方为根为本.
一首寓有哲理的诗.

谢谢老山点评！

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