William Zhou周道模
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 Posted: 2008-03-26 01:08:52 Post subject: [原创新诗] 草原的诗人 |
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草原的诗人
啃青嫩的草
吃鲜艳的花
站着 背上风雨阳光
卧着 身边星辉月色
牛羊是草原的诗人
看一眼天 天就蓝了云也白了
低一下头 草就绿了水也清了
叫一声 云就哭了花草也流泪了
走一步 牛点点黑了羊朵朵雪了
牛羊是遍布草原的诗人
不像马 踏碎寂静驮起了战争
不像狼 咬碎安宁染上了鲜血
只啃草 吃花 喝雪水
只捐皮 献肉 捧骨魂
牛啊羊啊 你们
是草原养育的诗人
2007．7．18-19 若尔盖草原
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半溪明月
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| Posted: 2008-03-26 01:38:25 Post subject: |
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| 很抒情的草原赞歌~问好周 |
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nobody
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| Posted: 2008-03-26 18:30:48 Post subject: |
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第一节最好，二节次之，三节有点失败。三节有点落入小学生作文的套路中了。
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hejun
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| Posted: 2008-03-26 18:50:10 Post subject: |
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还可在精炼。拜读大作
何均问好老乡
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荷梦
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| Posted: 2008-03-27 05:00:17 Post subject: |
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| 朗诵诗。。。 |
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上城
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| Posted: 2008-03-27 09:46:47 Post subject: |
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周先生到过草原啦？我欲往之
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William Zhou周道模
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| Posted: 2008-03-27 17:53:22 Post subject: |
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感谢上面五位的读评！近期再发一首写草原的。
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蓝花伞
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| Posted: 2008-03-27 18:27:42 Post subject: 动感 画面感,很巧妙的 |
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| 表诉,感染中! |
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