黄洋界
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 Posted: 2008-03-21 11:45:16 Post subject: 五律 新春试笔 |
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五律 新春试笔
霰雪飘梅去 光风入柳来
铺笺僵腕动 呵笔冻霜开
玉砚初盛墨 银编不染埃
开窗迎丽日 好雨润苍苔
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qinghongh
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| Posted: 2008-03-21 13:18:46 Post subject: |
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| 黄老师吟诗作画写春意，祝开春大吉！ |
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郑达夫
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| Posted: 2008-03-21 19:16:23 Post subject: |
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欣赏黄老师高雅情趣,问好！
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黄洋界
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| Posted: 2008-03-21 19:26:51 Post subject: |
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谢谢庆宏达夫雅赏和鼓励。
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| Posted: 2008-03-24 08:15:49 Post subject: |
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黄老师好作。
一联第二句，不知能否换成“斜风荡柳来”？
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黄洋界
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| Posted: 2008-03-24 08:31:16 Post subject: |
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谢谢有缘兄评改,"光风"扣和缓的春风,"斜风"则时令性差一点.
"入"字改"荡"字好.更形象了.
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