| 詩盜喜裸評 进士出身
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-18 00:43:23    Post subject: (独领风骚-仿波德莱尔风格)善良的这面 |   |  
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				| (独领风骚-仿波德莱尔风格)世界打开一本新书 曲元奇 主持 
 
 善良的这面
 
 愿上天,恩赐于你
 需要怎样的安慰?朋友
 这天底下种种的慰藉
 任由你无限量的选择,朋友
 这源自于在最艰困的时刻
 在惊涛骇浪之中,你曾伸出援手
 
 愿上天恩赐于你,朋友
 再也没有人能理解,我心中的痛
 我将孤独的舔拭着众人艳羡的伤口
 此后,无时无刻要仔细的筛选出
 最忠心的狗,在狗群之中
 哪里会找的到,朋友
 
 午门外,届时应该让它万头钻动
 群众需要看到叛逆者,被斩首
 
 2008/3/18那天0440
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		| 合心 秀才
 
  
 Joined: 03 Feb 2008
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-18 02:37:18    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 我将孤独的舔拭着众人艳羡的伤口 此后,无时无刻要仔们细的筛选出
 最忠心的狗,在狗群之中
 哪里会找的到,朋友
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		| 荷梦 进士出身
 
 
 Joined: 19 Dec 2006
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-18 03:41:42    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 喜欢读第二节! |  | 
	
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		| 下一个偶像是野兽 秀才
 
  
 Joined: 16 Jan 2007
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 Location: 西安
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-18 06:05:31    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 不错哦。问好! _________________
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		| 詩盜喜裸評 进士出身
 
  
 Joined: 15 May 2007
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-18 09:07:48    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 谢谢双和VS野兽!自己觉得写的很差,只是写了,就贴吧! _________________
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		| 上城 进士出身
 
  
 Joined: 15 Mar 2007
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 Location: 江夏黄鹤楼
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-18 16:25:36    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 哇。我也想写波德莱尔的。可惜你的这首不很地道  过几天写几首 跟你比比。哈哈。不过你的这首还是让我很吃惊~~
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		| 白水 大学士
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-18 19:24:36    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 曲元奇 主持    
 扑通
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		| 曲元奇 秀才
 
 
 Joined: 01 Mar 2008
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-19 00:47:02    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 诗盗兄说那首诗上独领风骚行吗?我说性 |  | 
	
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		| 半溪明月 榜眼
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-19 03:15:33    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 不太懂波德莱尔的风格,不过感觉诗盗这首还不错~ |  | 
	
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		| 詩盜喜裸評 进士出身
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-19 13:24:04    Post subject: 欺负人不是!写不好才比? |   |  
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	  | 伤城 wrote: |  
	  | 哇。我也想写波德莱尔的。可惜你的这首不很地道  过几天写几首 ...
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 本来想作成十四行,又想以现代笔触写古,又想。。。反正,想要的太多,什么都做不好。
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		| 詩盜喜裸評 进士出身
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-19 13:25:04    Post subject: 主持,不好? |   |  
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	  | 白水 Moonlight wrote: |  
	  | 曲元奇 主持    
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 公主给个建议!
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		| 詩盜喜裸評 进士出身
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-19 13:27:40    Post subject: 恩。。。 |   |  
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	  | 曲元奇 wrote: |  
	  | 诗盗兄说那首诗上独领风骚行吗?我说性 |  
 落尘的置顶(读领风骚),是由作者自己决定,诗盗只检视有无同题的要件。
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		| 詩盜喜裸評 进士出身
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-19 13:30:11    Post subject: 谢谢安慰! |   |  
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	  | 半溪明月 wrote: |  
	  | 不太懂波德莱尔的风格,不过感觉诗盗这首还不错~ |  
 谢明月版主选择安慰这个选项。
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		| 迪拜 同进士出身
 
 
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-19 17:00:00    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 还 
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		| 曲元奇 秀才
 
 
 Joined: 01 Mar 2008
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-19 21:58:28    Post subject: |   |  
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				| 波德来尔说诗的语言是炼金术   和善的这面 语言提炼的很好 |  | 
	
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		| 詩盜喜裸評 进士出身
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-19 22:06:37    Post subject: 谢曲兄! |   |  
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	  | 曲元奇 wrote: |  
	  | 波德来尔说诗的语言是炼金术   和善的这面 语言提炼的很好 |  
 觉得自己只有标提下的还不错尔!应该先学着您文字的编排、布置,再加入其他因素会好些。
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		| 詩盜喜裸評 进士出身
 
  
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				|  Posted: 2008-03-19 22:17:17    Post subject: 谢! |   |  
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				| 恩。 _________________
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		| 阿依琼裙 秀才
 
  
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