Maple Review :: View topic - 【七律】闭月

	Chinese Literature Society of North America \| Maple Review \| Immigrants in Canada \| Angel Studio \| The Driftwood Artist Society \| Ocean of Poetry \| Island of Music "HuaHe Cup" 2007 Chinese Mainland and Oversea Poetry Competition and Non-governmental Magazines and Newspapers Joint Exhibition starts on the first day of 2007.
	FAQ Search Memberlist Usergroups Register Profile Log in to check your private messages Sign in Blogs Weblogs News Album



Dictionary Check Poems' Rules & Forms Search for Chinese Poems Poetry & Music

Maple Review Home -> 古韵新音

【七律】闭月

是有缘
秀才

Joined: 08 Feb 2008
Posts: 741

是有缘Collection

Posted: 2008-02-24 18:32:32 Post subject: 【七律】闭月

桃红故里落纷纷，闭月羞云暗转门。命系三国夺壮志，情归四海逸轻尘。千秋霸业悲遗恨，万载垂名悼逝魂。青史留名传古曲，黄沙厚土没香坟。注：闭月，古四大美女之一。

晓松
举人

Joined: 26 Feb 2007
Posts: 1192

晓松Collection

Posted: 2008-02-24 21:29:31 Post subject:

纵有佳话留古曲，黄沙厚土没香坟。真实的写照。貂婵不但没坟，连下落也没交代。一种说法是，曹操赠关羽的赤兔马影射为貂婵。不过，也可能本人孤陋寡闻。

是有缘
秀才

Joined: 08 Feb 2008
Posts: 741

是有缘Collection

Posted: 2008-02-25 16:24:17 Post subject:

谢谢晓松评述。 _________________ 蜻蜓点水非无意愁云化雨是有情

莹雪
进士出身

Joined: 28 Sep 2006
Posts: 2520
Location: 中国－辽宁·三燕故都
莹雪Collection

Posted: 2008-02-25 17:47:38 Post subject:

用典精确。

qinghongh
榜眼

Joined: 14 Oct 2007
Posts: 4110

qinghonghCollection

Posted: 2008-02-26 16:31:56 Post subject:

为何有缘先生只写闭月？何不也写羞花，沉鱼和落雁，成一系列？

是有缘
秀才

Joined: 08 Feb 2008
Posts: 741

是有缘Collection

Posted: 2008-02-26 20:46:35 Post subject:

莹雪 wrote:

用典精确。

谢谢鼓励.

是有缘
秀才

Joined: 08 Feb 2008
Posts: 741

是有缘Collection

Posted: 2008-02-26 20:50:54 Post subject:

qinghongh wrote:

为何有缘先生只写闭月？何不也写羞花，沉鱼和落雁，成一系列？

问得有理。

贴出的是几个诗友同时写四大美女，有人先写了其她三人，于是闭月留给了我。希望哪天来了兴趣，把羞花，沉鱼和落雁补上。

notcoffee
童生

Joined: 27 Feb 2008
Posts: 53

notcoffeeCollection

Posted: 2008-02-27 22:28:55 Post subject:

貂婵的典可以再深挖 _________________ 云入虚怀无上下水逢雅境自方圆

戴玨
秀才

Joined: 03 Jan 2007
Posts: 808

戴玨Collection

Posted: 2008-02-28 01:43:15 Post subject:

“天”和“话”出律了。 _________________ I labour by singing light 我的blog 我的專欄

notcoffee
童生

Joined: 27 Feb 2008
Posts: 53

notcoffeeCollection

Posted: 2008-02-28 14:18:39 Post subject:

狗尾续貂,步韵一首. 倾城丽质堕红尘,月下焚香祈献身. 司马连环巧设计,凤仪始引弑奸臣. 枭雄赠美君相却,佳人从此了无痕. 未有裙钗离间智,一国天下怎三分. _________________ 云入虚怀无上下水逢雅境自方圆

是有缘
秀才

Joined: 08 Feb 2008
Posts: 741

是有缘Collection

Posted: 2008-02-28 20:05:09 Post subject:

戴玨 wrote:

“天”和“话”出律了。

谢谢戴班长指点。

惭愧，自己的竟然没看出来。斟酌后再改过。

是有缘
秀才

Joined: 08 Feb 2008
Posts: 741

是有缘Collection

Posted: 2008-02-28 20:07:07 Post subject:

notcoffee wrote:

狗尾续貂,步韵一首.
...

多谢相和。

Display posts from previous:

Emoticons





View more Emoticons

Page 1 of 1 View previous topic View next topic

Maple Review Home -> 古韵新音

Once you post your works here, that means you submits them to the magazine of Maple Review (North American Maple, or BeiMeiFeng), a bilingual journal published by Chinese Literature Society of North America. The magazine holds the right to translate them into Chinese, and publish them in both languages. You need to be responsible for the copyright issues of your own files uploaded.
Powered by phpBB © 2001, 2005 phpBB Group
phpBB Chinese interface was translated by iCy-fLaME