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颓废之美－－两首

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Posted: 2008-02-22 06:47:59 Post subject: 颓废之美－－两首

颓废之美 - 借筐追俗 by 点点儿语音攀上充血的心尖视网扯下纱薄的衣衫空气在宁静中膨胀推动炫耀的贪婪无边语细酿今夜美味千盏声柔醉周身纤细血管指间缭绕的香烟舞荡起飓风般的震撼在我面前没有了界限双手捧住粉色的柔软奔腾的血液似洪水狂澜任万灵畅在心中缠绵长夜散着白色的光线风的呼吸响彻在耳畔轻柔的肢体如短线的风筝时起时落不愿离你视线拥你温柔结实的臂弯看你天真满足的笑脸为你储满一辈子用不完的爱恋天亮之前我们说再见 04/24/2007 +++++++++++++++++++ 附：颓废之美 by 一筐酒液以猩红注解缠绵眼睛用迷离遮掩狂乱美绝的纤指微弹你浸透着汗水浮上梦的表面乐音以幽咽注射血管嘴唇用呢喃挑动心澜清亮的泪线划出我背负着忧郁飞在云的边缘仿佛还是一段残垣依然有你翘首风前绚烂着一朵致命的诱惑超然开发于白草芊芊风还是吹入我荒凉的胸如萨克管一样沙哑、轻缓琴弦摩擦出一缕紫色的淡烟如你的呻吟一般慵懒无声的爆裂是一种快感我无可救药地饮毒长叹看自己的碎片美妙地飞舞复归向沉寂的茫茫荒原 _________________ －－－其实你永远不懂我的心－－－

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Posted: 2008-02-22 07:08:17 Post subject:

凄美朗朗上口，慨当以歌 _________________ 为网友服务: 端茶倒水勤打扫!

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Posted: 2008-02-22 07:17:56 Post subject:

给岛主请安早上好｀｀｀ _________________ －－－其实你永远不懂我的心－－－

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Posted: 2008-02-22 09:13:04 Post subject:

有点带着镣铐跳舞的意思，不过跳得相当不错，格式上的自我限制反而起了很不错的效果，拜读问好

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Posted: 2008-02-22 17:31:37 Post subject:

问好歪歪，周末快乐｀｀｀｀ _________________ －－－其实你永远不懂我的心－－－

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Posted: 2008-02-22 19:19:31 Post subject:

l灵动跳跃的美。 _________________ 点击进入回到拉萨的火车

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Posted: 2008-02-22 20:57:03 Post subject:

还不够颓废的味。韵律也是诗的起步 _________________ 每个诗人都很重要

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Posted: 2008-02-23 09:46:53 Post subject:

回到拉萨 wrote:

l灵动跳跃的美。

搭车去拉萨｀｀
问好｀
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Posted: 2008-02-23 09:48:16 Post subject:

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还不够颓废的味。韵律也是诗的起步

很对！

谢伤城 Smile

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Posted: 2008-02-24 04:15:29 Post subject:

两首风格到很相似，有韵律感～

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Posted: 2008-02-24 05:20:52 Post subject:

hepingdao wrote:

凄美
朗朗上口，慨当以歌

我很赞同这个观点。
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Posted: 2008-02-25 12:38:33 Post subject:

拜坛！请多指教｀｀｀｀ _________________ －－－其实你永远不懂我的心－－－

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Posted: 2008-02-25 16:48:37 Post subject:

点点儿好作。觉的一筐的诗味更浓一些。 _________________ 蜻蜓点水非无意愁云化雨是有情

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Posted: 2008-02-25 18:12:00 Post subject:

来欣赏！问好点点！ _________________ 踏过废墟,走来 http://blog.sina.com.cn/m/weiyurong

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Posted: 2008-02-25 18:21:53 Post subject:

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点点儿好作。觉的一筐的诗味更浓一些。

有缘兄好｀｀｀那是自然，嘻。
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Posted: 2008-02-26 04:19:10 Post subject:

阿依琼裙 wrote:

来欣赏！

问好点点！

谢谢阿姨（依）兄。。。，请多指教。问好｀｀｀ Smile

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Posted: 2008-02-26 10:26:37 Post subject:

伤城 wrote:

还不够颓废的味。韵律也是诗的起步

这个说法偏颇！
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Posted: 2008-02-26 14:08:49 Post subject:

很颓废很美。很天真很傻。(joking, don't mind pls ) 不附一筐的，感觉会更好。下次找我垫背，包你闪光。 _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2008-02-27 16:30:26 Post subject:

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很颓废很美。
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谢谢垫背兄，牢记在心了 Smile

（8准反悔哦｀｀｀）
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Posted: 2008-02-27 16:32:37 Post subject:

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伤城 wrote:

还不够颓废的味。韵律也是诗的起步

这个说法偏颇！

您是说哪句偏颇？共两句涅。嘻

第二句？偶认为。 Very Happy

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