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(独领风骚-赏乐抒情)一个人的雨季
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PostPosted: 2008-02-20 08:01:13    Post subject: (独领风骚-赏乐抒情)一个人的雨季 Reply with quote

一个人的雨季

风吹过水边的影子
漾起柔波的涟漪
潮湿的谁的白色的裙裾
飞舞
一个人的雨季

雨淋湿黑色的发线
牵出飘浮的心绪
模糊的谁的忧伤的背影
定格
一个人的雨季

蔓藤般纠结的思念
一寸一寸生长 延展 努力
想要靠近你
我们相隔如此之近啊
只需要再
穿过
这一场无边的雨

一个人的雨季
风声掩没了我的叹息

(唯有沉默啊
沉默才是此刻我呼唤你的声音 )

我也觉得茉儿说的去掉最后两句有道理~ 感觉有些STRONG, 跟音乐不配~


DD 说音乐和图交给他~~

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PostPosted: 2008-02-20 08:20:18    Post subject: Reply with quote

嗯,没打我就好。。。。
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PostPosted: 2008-02-20 09:04:29    Post subject: Reply with quote

漂亮。最后的砍~
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PostPosted: 2008-02-20 11:07:30    Post subject: Reply with quote

喜欢。。幽幽的雨季
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而另一端是你清澈的眼睛。
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PostPosted: 2008-02-22 21:29:29    Post subject: Reply with quote

一个人的雨季
风声掩没了我的叹息
-----掩没了才好!雨季也有雨季的快乐!
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PostPosted: 2008-02-24 20:15:35    Post subject: Reply with quote

把后两句去了会更好。
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