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四季为你 之 夏
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PostPosted: 2008-02-05 00:47:53    Post subject: 四季为你 之 夏 Reply with quote


夏



星光下

散开整齐的长发

零乱的波浪

如夏日艳丽的玫瑰

在万种风情的夜色中

狂野 怒放

散发出

浓郁的芬芳



来吧

激情浪漫的红唇

或是

温柔娇媚的眼神

为你

在温润的花园中

绽放
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PostPosted: 2008-02-05 00:51:30    Post subject: Reply with quote
或是这样:

迎着潮湿的晚风

散开整齐的长发

零乱的波浪

是夏日玫瑰

在夜色中 在星光下

狂野 怒放

散发出

浓郁的芬芳



不太满意, 请大家帮忙~~谢谢了.
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PostPosted: 2008-02-05 05:29:04    Post subject: Reply with quote
既然是同一个标题，首先要想的是不是：
1-在同样风格里做出独立的味道。
2-从各个单一的风格里布下整体性。

目前，春、夏，除了四季是相关的以外，看不出其他相关性。
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PostPosted: 2008-02-05 06:37:39    Post subject: Reply with quote
詩盜喜裸評 wrote:
既然是同一个标题，首先要想的是不是：
...

原也是不需要相关的。　我就不喜欢配套的家具。
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PostPosted: 2008-02-05 10:42:59    Post subject: Reply with quote
爱姐姐过年好！
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PostPosted: 2008-02-05 12:52:29    Post subject: Reply with quote
悠子 wrote:
诗盗喜裸评 wrote:
既然是同一个标题，首先要想的是不是：
...

原也是不需要相关的。　我就不喜欢配套的家具。


但是你一定喜欢
自己家里的摆设
有着悠子的风格
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PostPosted: 2008-02-05 13:17:00    Post subject: Reply with quote
怎么大家都只看不砍哪~~

诗盗老师, 下刀吧~~
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PostPosted: 2008-02-05 13:26:55    Post subject: Reply with quote
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怎么大家都只看不砍哪~~

诗盗老师, 下刀吧~~


我说了呀？喂～爱爱！醒醒，醒醒～
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PostPosted: 2008-02-05 13:31:21    Post subject: Reply with quote
詩盜喜裸評 wrote:
爱爱 wrote:
怎么大家都只看不砍哪~~

诗盗老师, 下刀吧~~


我说了呀？喂～爱爱！醒醒，醒醒～


老师, 刚才饿晕了, 没看见老师赠言.
容我想想, 再交作业
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PostPosted: 2008-02-05 13:35:54    Post subject: Reply with quote
爱爱 wrote:
诗盗喜裸评 wrote:
爱爱 wrote:
怎么大家都只看不砍哪~~

诗盗老师, 下刀吧~~


我说了呀？喂～爱爱！醒醒，醒醒～


老师, 刚才饿晕了, 没看见老师赠言.
...


天哪！这里没有老师，你再这样叫，我也要叫你嗯嗯～怕了没？怕了吧！

醒醒，醒醒！
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PostPosted: 2008-02-05 14:02:49    Post subject: Reply with quote
詩盜喜裸評 wrote:
爱爱 wrote:
诗盗喜裸评 wrote:
爱爱 wrote:
怎么大家都只看不砍哪~~

诗盗老师, 下刀吧~~


我说了呀？喂～爱爱！醒醒，醒醒～


老师, 刚才饿晕了, 没看见老师赠言.
...


天哪！这里没有老师，你再这样叫，我也要叫你嗯嗯～怕了没？怕了吧！
...

嗯~~~怕......
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PostPosted: 2008-02-06 03:03:57    Post subject: Reply with quote
爱爱 wrote:
诗盗喜裸评 wrote:
爱爱 wrote:
诗盗喜裸评 wrote:
爱爱 wrote:
怎么大家都只看不砍哪~~

诗盗老师, 下刀吧~~


我说了呀？喂～爱爱！醒醒，醒醒～


老师, 刚才饿晕了, 没看见老师赠言.
...


天哪！这里没有老师，你再这样叫，我也要叫你嗯嗯～怕了没？怕了吧！
...

嗯~~~怕......


怕就好！（怕）一向比（打）来的有效！
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