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《山 庄》
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PostPosted: 2007-01-06 02:14:39    Post subject: 《山 庄》 Reply with quote
《山 庄》

壶酒钓竿越山梁, 欲寻净地不辞忙.
跨涧清涟水流碧, 步岭翠滴露含香.
林深幽静传鸟语, 桃放淡霭映霞光.
忽现一处仿古宅, 豪华富丽显堂皇.
原是矿主神通广, 金屋藏娇歌舞狂.
脂粉油气透窗外, 双双浪蝶飞过墙.
自然和谐一坡花, 具被此辈污染脏.
一阵阴风穿谷袭, 可是怨魂闹山庄?
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PostPosted: 2007-01-06 03:17:46    Post subject: Reply with quote
新韻七古？
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PostPosted: 2007-01-06 12:39:55    Post subject: Reply with quote
戴玨 wrote:
新韻七古？


是的,也算新乐府.
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PostPosted: 2007-01-15 02:17:08    Post subject: Reply with quote
古风写得不错。流畅，且景致层层递进。只是个人感觉只结句说了些情稍微显得淡了些。另“一”字用得稍多了点。浅见。
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