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PostPosted: 2008-01-31 13:33:38    Post subject: 杭州词 Reply with quote
花玉立
荷满湖
仿佛的狼藉残红

塔影六和
碑立英雄
何尝有桥断难行

正是残阳铺水
酷夏风起不扬
却吹我破帽于湖底

且葬身
问逝者已逝
来者可追？
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PostPosted: 2008-01-31 13:54:07    Post subject: Reply with quote
却吹我破帽于湖底 --- 有点煞风景
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PostPosted: 2008-01-31 13:55:43    Post subject: Reply with quote
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却吹我破帽于湖底 --- 有点煞风景

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PostPosted: 2008-01-31 13:56:30    Post subject: Reply with quote
咋办？？ (QUOTE 乱死不偿命)
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PostPosted: 2008-01-31 14:26:06    Post subject: Reply with quote
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咋办？？ (QUOTE 乱死不偿命)

煞风景却要罚款
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PostPosted: 2008-01-31 14:35:33    Post subject: Reply with quote
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啥么 wrote:
咋办？？ (QUOTE 乱死不偿命)

煞风景却要罚款


改成，我一头扎进湖底乘凉
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PostPosted: 2008-01-31 14:45:50    Post subject: Reply with quote
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改成，我一头扎进湖底乘凉

那不光是煞风景， 还违规
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PostPosted: 2008-01-31 14:50:11    Post subject: Reply with quote
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啥么 wrote:
改成，我一头扎进湖底乘凉

那不光是煞风景， 还违规


被扭送到楼外楼警察分店罚酒
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PostPosted: 2008-02-01 08:41:04    Post subject: Reply with quote
啥么啥么都会呢！最后一段可改几个字，以避开套用之嫌。
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PostPosted: 2008-02-01 14:51:36    Post subject: Reply with quote
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啥么啥么都会呢！最后一段可改几个字，以避开套用之嫌。


这诗算哪门子风格?(除了杀风景的问题)
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PostPosted: 2008-02-01 16:24:31    Post subject: Reply with quote
悠子 wrote:
诗盗喜裸评 wrote:
啥么啥么都会呢！最后一段可改几个字，以避开套用之嫌。


这诗算哪门子风格?(除了杀风景的问题)


作为落尘的版主，我有责任捍卫每一种风格，不管是哪门子的。所以你
违反了这里的版规，罚你新年留守看大门！哈哈～

啥么，肯定赞同！
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PostPosted: 2008-02-01 23:50:31    Post subject: Reply with quote
赞同，100个赞同
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PostPosted: 2008-02-01 23:52:39    Post subject: Reply with quote
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啥么啥么都会呢！最后一段可改几个字，以避开套用之嫌。


整篇50％都是套用的，积重难返

最后一段，唯恐夜深花睡去～～
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PostPosted: 2008-02-02 09:57:37    Post subject: Reply with quote
詩盜喜裸評 wrote:
作为落尘的版主，我有责任捍卫每一种风格，不管是哪门子的。所以你
...

只问问， 就虚成这样了。这门子也不用看。挂个SIGN：
“乱死不偿命， 煞风景却要罚款， 每位请交门票费十美元”

没人会来~
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PostPosted: 2008-02-02 23:13:47    Post subject: Reply with quote
啥么 wrote:
诗盗喜裸评 wrote:
啥么啥么都会呢！最后一段可改几个字，以避开套用之嫌。


整篇50％都是套用的，积重难返
...


哈哈～终于弄明白您所谓的拼贴！这好玩，可以玩玩。
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PostPosted: 2008-02-02 23:15:33    Post subject: Reply with quote
悠子 wrote:
诗盗喜裸评 wrote:
作为落尘的版主，我有责任捍卫每一种风格，不管是哪门子的。所以你
...

只问问， 就虚成这样了。这门子也不用看。挂个SIGN：
...


太贵了吧！这样好了，只要是悠子介绍来的，97折优待。
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