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对联学作十二
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PostPosted: 2008-01-31 19:28:48    Post subject: 对联学作十二 Reply with quote

对联学作十二

【出句】树老怕秋末【巫逖】
【对句】梅葩喜雪临【梧桐】

【出句】蛙唱荷风静 [苑眉]
【对句】蝉鸣竹影幽【梧桐】

【对句】世间花艳人尤艳[梧桐]
【出句】天上月圆桌未圆[巫逖]

【出句】花下无人当有鬼 [苑眉]
【对句】梦中有影亦销魂 [梧桐]

【出句】一杯饮尽琉璃恨 [苑眉]
【对句】万缕凝成块垒愁[梧桐]

【对句】临端午, 江碧龙舟渡[梧桐]
【出句】近中秋,团圆镜中求[杨十八];

【出句】青衫尽染前朝事 [苑眉]
【对句】翠竹轻霑后院风[梧桐]

【出句】月笼窗纱,簟凉衾冷,三更梦未酣,
惊起,永夜愁心期寄与,婵娟万里 [苑眉]

【对句】风舞帐幔,腓热颊赤,五鼓情初酽,
躁烦,深宵怅绪盼相从,娥影千秋【梧桐】
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PostPosted: 2008-02-01 06:51:21    Post subject: Reply with quote

第八联写出情意绵绵之态,不错.第二联:

蛙唱荷风晚
蝉鸣竹影清

"晚""清"二字尚可推敲,"晚'字换"静'字,"清"字换"幽"字,如此动静相生,更显其
风静影幽之美,如何?供参考.
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PostPosted: 2008-02-01 16:33:34    Post subject: Reply with quote

黄洋界 wrote:
第八联写出情意绵绵之态,不错.第二联:
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谢谢先生!敬茶!问好!
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