秋叶 秀才
Joined: 17 Feb 2007 Posts: 769
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Posted: 2008-01-27 11:10:02 Post subject: 几首关于春天旧作共勉 |
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春节快到了, 贴上几首关于春天旧作共勉, 并望斧正。
丽日驱寒尽,
春花竞斗妍。
人生如快马,
拼搏又新年。
岭外初春翠,
涌流飘彩纱。
崖边林下望,
又见旧时花。
春寒韶韵在,
晖映动人心。
莹彩有高洁,
雪峰传籁音。
飘云影绿池,
摇柳写新诗。
黄鹂不知倦,
春风日出时。
春山烟雨聚,
归燕舞升平,
万树凝香雪,
遥闻涧水声。
雪压春花未可妍,
平湖波静起寒烟。
归心已寄秋鸿去,
遥望长天又一年。 |
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冰清 同进士出身
Joined: 29 Mar 2007 Posts: 1921
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Posted: 2008-01-27 11:37:05 Post subject: |
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沁透了春的欢快和生机
万树凝香雪,
遥闻涧水声。
静观, 远望, 有声有色, 令人神往. |
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qinghongh 榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007 Posts: 4110
qinghonghCollection |
Posted: 2008-01-27 12:55:55 Post subject: |
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秋叶春曲早,旧词意境高。
跟一首 五绝 早春
岁末飘然去,山原雪已稀。
一朝春信至,万木竞新枝。 |
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戴玨 秀才

Joined: 03 Jan 2007 Posts: 808
戴玨Collection |
Posted: 2008-01-27 14:40:51 Post subject: |
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七絕最好! _________________ I labour by singing light
我的blog
我的專欄 |
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晓松 举人

Joined: 26 Feb 2007 Posts: 1192
晓松Collection |
Posted: 2008-01-27 17:13:47 Post subject: |
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几乎每首都含“春”,春意盎然~
问好秋叶兄! |
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黄洋界 探花

Joined: 23 Mar 2007 Posts: 3301 Location: 多伦多,加拿大 黄洋界Collection |
Posted: 2008-01-27 17:41:47 Post subject: |
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这组春之颂歌,的确七绝最好,七绝的结尾两句最好
问好秋叶.. _________________ ++++++++++++++
喜金石书画,友竹菊梅兰 |
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暗香如沁 秀才
Joined: 14 Jan 2007 Posts: 885 Location: 北京 暗香如沁Collection |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2008-01-28 17:48:41 Post subject: |
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欣赏 |
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不亦悦乎 童生
Joined: 02 Apr 2007 Posts: 40
不亦悦乎Collection |
Posted: 2008-01-29 14:39:13 Post subject: |
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喜欢第二首,七绝更好! |
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