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砸吧，《裸心》

詩盜喜裸評
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Posted: 2008-01-21 17:59:18 Post subject:

梦这端是我脉脉的凝视另一端是你清澈的眼睛这样有没有比较好？对齐了！我喜欢你自己选给自己的图片！下周刷你，请预作准备！ _________________ 可情可理，去捧就真

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Posted: 2008-01-21 18:07:55 Post subject:

詩盜喜裸評 wrote:

梦这端是我脉脉的凝视
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奥，等我有时间，不懒就去改
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梦的一端是我脉脉的凝视，
而另一端是你清澈的眼睛。

詩盜喜裸評
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Posted: 2008-01-21 18:16:32 Post subject:

红袖添乱 wrote:

诗盗喜裸评 wrote:

梦这端是我脉脉的凝视
...

奥，等我有时间，不懒就去改

可见不好！这样：

梦的一端是我脉脉的凝视
在另一端是你清澈的眼睛

请准备大约1000字的自评或简介，说自己、说作品、说理念都可以。
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Posted: 2008-01-21 18:29:58 Post subject:

我？我为什么要写1000字的理念？1000字？你故意的吧？不信！好，我就说说我的理念。。我就不信邪。。。。 _________________ 梦的一端是我脉脉的凝视，而另一端是你清澈的眼睛。

詩盜喜裸評
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Posted: 2008-01-21 18:34:49 Post subject:

红袖添乱 wrote:

我？我为什么要写1000字的理念？1000字？你故意的吧？不信！
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哇！期待哪！引颈企盼。让人看看写诗的也可以行文，像苏轼一般，写什么是什么！

又及：

梦的一端是我脉脉的凝视，
而另一端是你清澈的眼睛。

这样好多了！才不会觉着斜视，或斜眼瞪人的感觉！
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Posted: 2008-01-21 22:55:27 Post subject:

虽是一颗裸心,但承载得很多.... 问好红袖~~ _________________ 我只说三句话,加上上面的一句,我的话说完了

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Posted: 2008-01-21 23:05:15 Post subject:

心裸了最动人地 _________________ 这有点麻烦

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Posted: 2008-01-21 23:12:48 Post subject:

啥么 wrote:

心裸了最动人地

就是有点麻烦.....呵
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Posted: 2008-01-22 08:56:32 Post subject:

袖袖：因你脉脉的凝视，盗盗的眼睛便清澈了许多~ 呵呵，看什么都清澈，哪里有落尘

詩盜喜裸評
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Posted: 2008-01-22 21:59:40 Post subject:

悠子 wrote:

袖袖：因你脉脉的凝视，盗盗的眼睛便清澈了许多~
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这不回，成了默认！明着认吧，只是帐单上要填什么名目？
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Posted: 2008-01-23 11:05:01 Post subject:

袖子，把你家狗狗寄給偶吧：）） _________________ －－－其实你永远不懂我的心－－－

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Posted: 2008-01-23 18:40:18 Post subject:

点点儿 wrote:

袖子，把你家狗狗寄給偶吧：））

你会爱s她。。太好玩了。。

那天我贴上她在群组
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梦的一端是我脉脉的凝视，
而另一端是你清澈的眼睛。

詩盜喜裸評
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Posts: 2984
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Posted: 2008-01-23 19:15:02 Post subject:

红袖添乱 wrote:

点点儿 wrote:

袖子，把你家狗狗寄给偶吧：））

你会爱s她。。太好玩了。。
...

女人把狗当宠物对待，男人把狗当忠朋对待。所以狗喜欢男人多些！
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