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下雪了(外一首)

半溪明月
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Posted: 2008-01-13 16:53:21 Post subject: 下雪了(外一首)

下雪了整个冬天，她都在沮丧怕是冬天已老老得心都不再颤抖终于，细盐般的雪滚落钻进脖子，挂上睫毛赖皮狗似地贴在鼻尖慢慢熔化。她神秘笑了日子越来越近雪花关在窗外暖风机呼呼，絮语脚边她一边翻看日历一边数镜中的皱纹她答应收他的礼物文字中许能看到金属光泽但她已到暮年，他带着诗稿早进了墓穴

迪拜
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Posted: 2008-01-13 17:02:24 Post subject:

明月的不错很浪漫（第一首）

杯中冲浪
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Posted: 2008-01-13 22:45:39 Post subject:

她一边翻看日历一边数镜中的皱纹她答应收他的礼物文字中许能看到金属光泽但她已到暮年，他带着诗稿早进了墓穴 _________________ 杯中冲浪.披履而行 http://blog.sina.com.cn/shoutao006

溪语
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Posted: 2008-01-14 01:24:11 Post subject:

雪花关在窗外暖风机呼呼，絮语脚边她一边翻看日历一边数镜中的皱纹 ------冬之印象! _________________ 溪语的博客:家住鄂西

悠子
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Posted: 2008-01-14 01:47:00 Post subject:

喜欢下雪了，有趣

白水
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Posted: 2008-01-14 01:49:13 Post subject:

悠子 wrote:

喜欢下雪了，有趣

同感

刘雨萍
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Posted: 2008-01-14 04:24:35 Post subject:

白水和明月的空间都在下雪。堆个雪人玩玩。很久没来，问个好。 _________________ 隔海抒情

nobody
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Posted: 2008-01-14 05:27:26 Post subject:

是啊，秋天到的时候，我枫也是一片秋意。。。以后都不用看天气预报了，哈哈。诗写的干脆。 _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

佳忆
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Posted: 2008-01-14 19:08:37 Post subject:

读~~ _________________ 我只说三句话,加上上面的一句,我的话说完了

中国湖北:文胜
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Posted: 2008-01-14 19:12:55 Post subject:

是的，下雪了 _________________ 无他。爱诗，仅此。诗心、歌爱、走路。足矣！个人网站http://blog.sina.com.cn/ak5hmwz79sytbd0d

莞君
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Posted: 2008-01-14 20:17:45 Post subject:

空灵的诗歌问好姐姐学习了 _________________ 莞君

嘉慕思
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Posted: 2008-01-15 00:54:59 Post subject:

丑我者心也美我者情也知我着明月也 _________________ 我为自己唱挽歌---文学是个人的选择,不是集体的强加

蔡宁1
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Posted: 2008-01-15 01:45:59 Post subject:

雪花关在窗外暖风机呼呼，絮语脚边她一边翻看日历一边数镜中的皱纹她答应收他的礼物文字中许能看到金属光泽 ---------------客观物象与主观心情交融！十分欣赏！

王晓琴
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Posted: 2008-01-15 02:53:13 Post subject:

问好！ _________________ 安徽六安市裕安区政协王晓琴邮编：237000 伊妹儿：wangxiaoqin3@126.com 安徽琴子的BLOG http://blog.sina.com.cn/wxq3

赵雅君
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Posted: 2008-01-15 03:49:51 Post subject:

整个冬天，她都在沮丧怕是冬天已老老得心都不再颤抖 ——入情而细腻的诗句。问好：）

半溪明月
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Posted: 2008-01-15 16:49:24 Post subject:

问好大家了，这两首第二首稍好点,我正在尝试新的写法,还在琢磨中，明月这里感谢大家的关注和评读!

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