詩盜喜裸評 进士出身

Joined: 15 May 2007 Posts: 2984 Location: 台湾,台北 詩盜喜裸評Collection |
Posted: 2008-01-10 04:34:30 Post subject: |
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一二段還行,這句很好(动一动,就听到什么在落)第三段是敗筆! _________________ 可情可理,去捧就真 |
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韩少君 进士出身

Joined: 06 Apr 2007 Posts: 2558 Location: 吉林四平 韩少君Collection |
Posted: 2008-01-10 12:37:46 Post subject: |
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最近忙得很,很少上论坛.问好! 感谢你们大家对论坛的精心呵护! _________________ 靠才华为自己带来幸福的是才子;靠才华为自己带来痛苦的是诗人!!http://blog.sina.com.cn/hanshaojun345 |
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半溪明月 榜眼

Joined: 30 Sep 2006 Posts: 4760
半溪明月Collection |
Posted: 2008-01-10 12:53:47 Post subject: |
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问好少君,莞君和诗盗~ |
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詩盜喜裸評 进士出身

Joined: 15 May 2007 Posts: 2984 Location: 台湾,台北 詩盜喜裸評Collection |
Posted: 2008-01-11 05:19:13 Post subject: |
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終於遇上您啦!問好~
白小姐特意委託我向您問好,您好啊!))))37 _________________ 可情可理,去捧就真 |
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嘉慕思 童生
Joined: 12 Jan 2008 Posts: 78 Location: 佳木斯 嘉慕思Collection |
Posted: 2008-01-13 16:25:01 Post subject: |
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你病了
在患处贴一片梅花呀
嫣红的小伤口
对着溪水和明月吟唱
对着忧郁的气质吟唱
对着嘉慕思
吟唱 _________________ 我为自己唱挽歌---文学是个人的选择,不是集体的强加 |
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半溪明月 榜眼

Joined: 30 Sep 2006 Posts: 4760
半溪明月Collection |
Posted: 2008-01-13 16:45:36 Post subject: |
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这几句不错哦~ |
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半溪明月 榜眼

Joined: 30 Sep 2006 Posts: 4760
半溪明月Collection |
Posted: 2008-01-13 16:50:38 Post subject: |
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詩盜喜裸評 wrote: |
終於遇上您啦!問好~
白小姐特意委託我向您問好,您好啊!))))37 |
呵呵,小嘴真甜哈~  |
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