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七绝—猫

莹雪
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Posted: 2007-12-31 17:36:41 Post subject: 七绝—猫

妙态轻盈傲碧穹，逍遥独立不虚空。灵身急速飘然去，不叫佳肴使躯躬。

詩盜喜裸評
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Posted: 2008-01-02 13:47:08 Post subject:

妙态轻盈傲碧穹？作者或可解說一番。這首作品是貓，用：不叫。是刻意的嗎？同音字或同義字很多。由此句來看，並沒有原字義的意含存在，刻意用的道理何在？ _________________ 可情可理，去捧就真

莹雪
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Posted: 2008-01-02 18:22:00 Post subject:

詩盜喜裸評 wrote:

妙态轻盈傲碧穹？作者或可解說一番。
這首作品是貓，用：不叫。是刻意的嗎？同音字或同義字很多。由此句來看，並沒有原字義的意含存在，刻意用的道理何在？

並沒有刻意，或許是不能理解吧。謝謝點評！

詩盜喜裸評
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Posted: 2008-01-03 01:57:32 Post subject:

莹雪 wrote:

詩盜喜裸評 wrote:

並沒有刻意，或許是不能理解吧。謝謝點評！

好，答，案。謝謝回貼！
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果味儿豆腐
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Posted: 2008-01-03 02:10:51 Post subject:

我觉得点评这首诗的关键不是刻意不刻意的问题，而在于合句俚语入绝和失声的问题。不叫佳肴使躯躬的意思应理解为猫不为了美味而卑躬屈膝，但不叫是俚语，躯失声。楼主，我说的对吗？

詩盜喜裸評
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Posted: 2008-01-03 02:39:25 Post subject:

1-不太懂這裡的回貼機制，怎是我收到您的回貼通知？ 2-您的理解肯定比我的不理解能讓樓主覺得滿意。 3-質疑的是（不叫）的使用，推敲的故事應該聽過？至於：妙态轻盈傲碧穹。就算了，算了吧！ 4-4-以下不理解的成份居多，除之。 _________________ 可情可理，去捧就真

果味儿豆腐
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Posted: 2008-01-03 03:12:05 Post subject:

楼主满意，说明我读懂了她的诗，而不是用鸡蛋壳当成鸡骨头^-^ _________________

詩盜喜裸評
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Posted: 2008-01-03 03:19:52 Post subject:

果味儿豆腐 wrote:

楼主满意，说明我读懂了她的诗，而不是用鸡蛋壳当成鸡骨头^-^

我讀懂了您的話，希望您也產生了您所形容的樓主的滿意！
我也讀懂了樓主的作品，只是我並沒有企圖讓樓主覺得滿意。
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果味儿豆腐
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Posted: 2008-01-03 03:50:05 Post subject:

在你点评莹雪的诗歌之前，希望你能看看这个，因为理解诗歌的内涵，需要了解一些作者的生活，谢谢 http://coviews.com/viewtopic.php?t=27532&highlight=%D3%A8%D1%A9 _________________

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Posted: 2008-01-03 03:55:48 Post subject:

果味儿豆腐 wrote:

在你点评莹雪的诗歌之前，希望你能看看这个，因为理解诗歌的内涵，需要了解一些作者的生活，谢谢

http://coviews.com/viewtopic.php?t=27532&highlight=%D3%A8%D1%A9

喔，喔？我沒去，晚些去。你的說法我不認同。（這樣一說，唉！我可能又被屏蔽了。）
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