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梅影三叠
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PostPosted: 2007-10-08 16:32:42    Post subject: 不去西藏(几首短诗) Reply with quote

几首短诗

文:梅影三叠

● 不去西藏



想像中的苍鹰
总是神情落寞,立在传说的尽头
不发一言
雪山沉寂,守着圣洁的雪莲花

天苍苍,野茫茫
风不厌其烦地吟诵草原民谣
一条洁白的哈达,从天际飘下

我用一整夜的时间来打点行李
天还没亮之前,我不去西藏


● 彩云之南

茶马古道的铃
响在蜿蜒的电视剧中
泸沽湖,绿孔雀
在我的梦中一一绽放

插上彩云的翅膀,我在路上
最好逢着一个抢亲的队伍
把我的一生
都种在蝴蝶泉边




● 撒哈拉的沙

无垠的沙,从地图延伸到一个女人的笔下
旷远辽阔,毫不忧伤
爱情与传奇并不缺水
沙漠深处盛开一朵朵奇丽的花

那个女人叫三毛
我一遍遍翻看她的青春
当一双丝袜结束了旅程
我的梦也因此失血




  ● 鸟儿飞过



飞过旷野。一些音符掠过云朵
果实在树荫下闪烁
空气自由,草原清新

飞过溪涧。山中流淌纯净的情歌
风中闪现一些旧日容颜
暮色渐入苍茫

飞过窗前。光阴啁啾着从笔端滑落
钟声敲响,指尖变冷
是谁的头发秋叶般凋零

一只鸟飞走了。
又一只鸟飞走了。
不见踪影,只剩歌吟




 ● 墙

隔开历史与现实的,是一卷典籍
隔开城市与乡村的,是一条马路
隔开春天与秋天的,是一季燥热

隔开你与我的,是冷漠的眼神
和迟疑的脚步

● 窗台上的影子

夜晚和夜晚注定不一样。
笑语喧哗是别人的
家庭和睦是昨天的
遍游千山是梦中的

夜风中,谁的影子在窗台飘摇
陪着那盆寂寞的兰花?

● 空城

青草和鸟鸣被劫掠一空
灯光和微笑被劫掠一空
空余下,一城雪絮纷纷
炊烟遥远,护城河里没有归帆

站成一棵树,手指长出失水的丫枝
呀!脚下居然是一片黄沙

● 废墟

写满字和没写字的废纸
塞满抽屉
向东流和向西流的废水
呛出江河的眼泪
燃烧大地并炙烤天空的废气
张牙舞爪

推倒,重来
在偌大的废墟上,如何搭建天堂?
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PostPosted: 2007-10-08 16:44:23    Post subject: Reply with quote

已经很不错了
丰满

如要改进
可以削出一些陡峭之处
新奇之感

问好
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PostPosted: 2007-10-08 16:55:57    Post subject: Reply with quote

多谢岛主意见,我会考虑的:)遥握祝安!!
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PostPosted: 2007-10-08 17:17:43    Post subject: Reply with quote

隔开历史与现实的,是一卷典籍
隔开城市与乡村的,是一条马路
隔开春天与秋天的,是一季燥热


前面很好,结尾有点实了~其实蛮喜欢这一首的!
● 不去西藏 ● 撒哈拉的沙 也喜欢~问好三色堇~
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PostPosted: 2007-10-08 17:22:48    Post subject: Reply with quote

我是明月 wrote:
隔开历史与现实的,是一卷典籍
隔开城市与乡村的,是一条马路
隔开春天与秋天的,是一季燥热


前面很好,结尾有点实了~其实蛮喜欢这一首的!
● 不去西藏 ● 撒哈拉的沙 也喜欢~问好三色堇~


三色堇和三叠,不是一人呀
Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2007-10-08 17:37:36    Post subject: Reply with quote

哦,对不起,看错人了~也写的不错的,我说感觉风格变了呢!Smile
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PostPosted: 2007-10-10 03:30:31    Post subject: Reply with quote

我是明月 wrote:
隔开历史与现实的,是一卷典籍
隔开城市与乡村的,是一条马路
隔开春天与秋天的,是一季燥热


前面很好,结尾有点实了~其实蛮喜欢这一首的!
● 不去西藏 ● 撒哈拉的沙 也喜欢~问好三色堇~


问好明月朋友!!
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PostPosted: 2007-10-10 03:32:38    Post subject: Reply with quote

hepingdao wrote:
我是明月 wrote:
隔开历史与现实的,是一卷典籍
隔开城市与乡村的,是一条马路
隔开春天与秋天的,是一季燥热


前面很好,结尾有点实了~其实蛮喜欢这一首的!
● 不去西藏 ● 撒哈拉的沙 也喜欢~问好三色堇~


三色堇和三叠,不是一人呀
Very Happy


也曾有人误会过:)
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PostPosted: 2007-10-10 03:34:06    Post subject: Reply with quote

我是明月 wrote:
哦,对不起,看错人了~也写的不错的,我说感觉风格变了呢!Smile


没事,她是我姐啊:)
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PostPosted: 2007-11-25 04:17:24    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢朋友们~~
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PostPosted: 2007-11-26 09:05:35    Post subject: Reply with quote

诗短, 韵味长! Laughing
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PostPosted: 2007-11-26 19:42:26    Post subject: Reply with quote

影影好, 何时错过了这组好诗歌. 提起来
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PostPosted: 2007-12-15 01:10:49    Post subject: Reply with quote

朋友们好
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PostPosted: 2007-12-15 07:09:02    Post subject: Reply with quote

读过,再读,很有味道!问好
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PostPosted: 2007-12-18 17:11:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

精彩的一组,欣赏,问好!!
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PostPosted: 2008-01-09 14:34:22    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢世学朋友!
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PostPosted: 2008-01-10 04:27:08    Post subject: Reply with quote

作者對文字有一套,只好說:一次發這麼多首,期望什麼?

想像中的蒼鷹。這句神奇!神來之筆。
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PostPosted: 2008-03-24 20:39:05    Post subject: Reply with quote

多谢朋友们
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PostPosted: 2008-03-25 03:57:58    Post subject: Reply with quote

把我的一生
都种在蝴蝶泉边
直白的表达,效果也很好。
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一组好诗。
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