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暗香如沁
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Posted: 2007-12-02 10:46:13 Post subject: 卜算子．七问

卜算子.问风几处散花香？几处依禅静？惟见心思独往来，不与谁相映。邀雨共贪杯，洗尽红尘影。一缕轻狂卷暮云，岂是天能定？卜算子.问天暮色老斜阳，山月还初醒。惟有风儿不动情，惊了归鸦兴。是处已无声，戏语红尘净。天地沧然应怜吾，借个才人命？卜算子．问心山月本无情，只是人难静。一点幽心寄与谁？满目斜阳冷。不待坠红尘，争得由吾定？笑骂苍天未识伊，寂寂寻风影。卜算子．问月未见几分明，何与山争兴？是怕伊人不识情，先取心呼应？　一笑泪凝眸，待把尘埃定。若得来生不做伊，再许行君令。卜算子．问碑暮色掩碑林，写尽悲欢命。莫道醒时不识寒，今个谁呼应？素手又折枝，欲把天门令。再有来生望告知，此处当为镜。卜算子．问禅七窍入禅音，依旧心难定。独对香堂万盏灯，未悟莲花境。本欲待回头，悄把前生省。怎个红尘尽是非，不渡潇湘命！卜算子．问山山色已生尘，是处何来净？一点秋心去复还，寄与谁呼应？　吾欲问斜阳，可照萧疏景？满目寒鸦不忍闻，又许三分冷。 _________________ http://blog.sina.com.cn/axrq用寂寞谱写最美的舞曲~

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Posted: 2007-12-02 11:10:25 Post subject:

古诗词表达内心的激昂低回的感觉, 一般是点到为止, 我看暗香如沁这一组,接近了这个体裁的边界, 情感达到极致, 有所突破激情是一种状态, 低落也是一种状态, 这种高低迂回, 让人感慨诗词是一个虚拟的世界希望你每天开心 _________________ 为网友服务: 端茶倒水勤打扫!

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Posted: 2007-12-02 16:14:33 Post subject:

有屈子之情怀,有出世之感慨,欣赏. _________________ ++++++++++++++ 喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰

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Posted: 2007-12-02 17:03:36 Post subject:

一口气七问，欣赏了，尤其喜欢《问风》。有一点儿想法：在《问山》中出现“吾欲问斜阳”似乎不大协调。一己之见，仅供参考~

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Posted: 2007-12-02 18:42:22 Post subject:

才高且情深，红尘又禅心。好词耐读。

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Posted: 2007-12-02 21:19:36 Post subject:

冰心、实心、丹心！问好暗香。

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Posted: 2007-12-03 20:24:56 Post subject:

hepingdao wrote:

古诗词表达内心的激昂低回的感觉, 一般是点到为止,
我看暗香如沁这一组,接近了这个体裁的边界,
情感达到极致, 有所突破
激情是一种状态, 低落也是一种状态, 这种高低迂回, 让人感慨

诗词是一个虚拟的世界
希望你每天开心

谢谢老师的评语．很希望您能多多指点。
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Posted: 2007-12-03 20:25:29 Post subject:

黄洋界 wrote:

有屈子之情怀,有出世之感慨,欣赏.

问好老师。
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Posted: 2007-12-03 20:26:19 Post subject:

晓松 wrote:

一口气七问，欣赏了，尤其喜欢《问风》。
有一点儿想法：在《问山》中出现“吾欲问斜阳”似乎不大协调。一己之见，仅供参考~

很感谢老师中肯的意见。暗香再斟酌．问好。
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Posted: 2007-12-03 20:26:47 Post subject:

qinghongh wrote:

才高且情深，红尘又禅心。好词耐读。

惭愧。问好。
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Posted: 2007-12-03 20:27:18 Post subject:

冰清 wrote:

冰心、实心、丹心！
问好暗香。

更重要没人．

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Posted: 2007-12-03 21:34:47 Post subject:

暗香如沁 wrote:

晓松 wrote:

一口气七问，欣赏了，尤其喜欢《问风》。
有一点儿想法：在《问山》中出现“吾欲问斜阳”似乎不大协调。一己之见，仅供参考~

很感谢老师中肯的意见。暗香再斟酌．问好。

我不是老师，是老“实”，实的有话直说，勿怪哦~
其实我是有嘴说别人，没嘴说自己。真让我写，漫说七问，一问都写不出。
问候！

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Posted: 2007-12-05 18:33:46 Post subject:

问天问风问禅音，何处使心静？满怀思绪化作诗，一展好才情。

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Posted: 2007-12-07 17:11:07 Post subject:

天地万物,随手拈来.嬉笑怒骂,起行静定,皆有思有心有情.词忧而心静,句愁而思清,难得糊涂!

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Posted: 2007-12-07 23:20:56 Post subject:

晓松 wrote:

暗香如沁 wrote:

晓松 wrote:

一口气七问，欣赏了，尤其喜欢《问风》。
有一点儿想法：在《问山》中出现“吾欲问斜阳”似乎不大协调。一己之见，仅供参考~

很感谢老师中肯的意见。暗香再斟酌．问好。

我不是老师，是老“实”，实的有话直说，勿怪哦~
其实我是有嘴说别人，没嘴说自己。真让我写，漫说七问，一问都写不出。
问候！

老师谦虚.您说的很对.
如果没有人对我提意见。那也是一种悲哀.该感谢老师.只有这样,暗香才能进步.问好。
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Posted: 2007-12-07 23:21:34 Post subject:

qinghongh wrote:

问天问风问禅音，何处使心静？
满怀思绪化作诗，一展好才情。

心难静.难来情啊.
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Posted: 2007-12-07 23:22:28 Post subject:

楚人 wrote:

天地万物,随手拈来.嬉笑怒骂,起行静定,皆有思有心有情.词忧而心静,句愁而思清,难得糊涂!

是,难得糊涂.
只是糊涂亦难有界限.问兄安好。
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Posted: 2007-12-10 02:54:37 Post subject:

荷梦只能说：学习了！

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Posted: 2007-12-14 07:48:37 Post subject:

喜欢这组, 问好暗香

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Posted: 2007-12-14 07:52:40 Post subject:

荷梦 wrote:

荷梦只能说：学习了！ Embarassed

问好美女．欢迎您的到来．
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