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春夏合奏狂想曲
李运邦
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PostPosted: 2007-11-29 05:00:18    Post subject: 春夏合奏狂想曲 Reply with quote

<<春夏合奏狂想曲>>
--寻思中西文化精神的最佳契合

一个正午, 在四月之外
乌云的衣裳吸干了太阳沸腾的热血
形式的翎毛,赶不上内容的步伐
急爬满额头, 淋漓出大汗

天气预报,听到谎言
忙乱地说:明天风雨大作
可预言也有生病的半个时候啊
风雨失约大地,提前出场了
在傍晚时分,开始演奏:
天籁之音,人间喜剧或悲剧
猛烈打破了 张嘴的玻璃
及其上面, 发黄的旧报纸
记载着:四.一二反革命政变的缘起
地壳的肝脏, 也撞成了严重的内伤
可没法击毁 :窗框和屋内闪亮的灯盏
更没能浸透报纸里,老不死的观念呀
封建的胡须在黑洞中,潜滋暗长

风雨 肆无忌惮之后,桃花雪凋残
蜜蜂伤心地笑了,幻想窃喜地哭了
而行走不堪重负,深陷古道的泥浆里
突然之间停电,心灵的极光
仍在自言自语:思恋游子的路坎坷了
于是,梦登上夜暮搭起的舞台
与记忆 共同导演----
任意地排列 组合自由的图景
生命的纯洁单一或复杂多变
竟然,如此地魔幻主义
此时此刻,概率亦无能为力了
情节与故事,正上演着活剧:
生活海洋里的酸 甜 苦 辣......

时代的钟声,锈在了平凡里
寂寞寻不到伟大,伟大已被战争打伤
缪斯躲在 死亡的深渊的最深处
睡熟了,不再来过问红尘之事
唐诗 宋词正坐在神的十字架上
痛心不已,哭睡呢 人类还是自己
墓碑走出冤魂来,嗥叫着:
独自在旷野,梦游似的飘 荡 飘 荡

风吼空了天,雨叫亮了夜
燕子剪裁云彩的花衣,给月儿寄去
绿洗礼罢了,更加碧绿 迷人
醒,终于起床;思想却仓皇逃离
群星的虔诚,隐现在那里呢
世界的东方, 还是西方

黄河舞动飞天的姿态,浪花的
锯齿,嚼吞着打转的漩涡
上升 上升 再上升!
长江练就气功的内力,三国的
鼎足,滚碾着莫测的历史
前进 前进 再前进!

在黄河 长江之中
在东方之上,在现代之后
在二十一世纪的和平 发展里
我虚怀若谷 由衷地请教:
莎士比亚 歌德 卡夫卡
鲁迅 钱钟书 海子...
如何寻到: 东 西方最默契的
上帝不慎遗忘的秘密
怎样按照神奇的鱼尾太极图
----筑建 融古通今
固若金汤的未来 桥梁......

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PostPosted: 2007-11-29 07:15:32    Post subject: Reply with quote

太主观的语言是不是阻碍了诗意的理解?
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迪拜
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PostPosted: 2007-11-29 18:11:39    Post subject: Reply with quote

缺少了诗意

即使是政治性的题材

也要练习

达到“有意境”

前人,有很多人都这样

太“硬”
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PostPosted: 2007-11-29 18:18:38    Post subject: Reply with quote

鼓励鼓励~ Very Happy
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李运邦
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PostPosted: 2007-11-30 04:32:01    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢各位老师的指教、批评,我会继续努力使自己的诗艺提高?!
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