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[旧临屏]风停了

亘古清露儿
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Posted: 2006-12-12 00:30:46 Post subject: [旧临屏]风停了

该如何细诉多年的愿望？一行人，像一群归雁散落在南国我的执着，透明如风秋夜，排队上路目光如炬，想谱曲只用自己的风格不是贝多芬和瞎子阿柄没有寒冷和悲伤我的情人和朋友他们在哪里风停了，总会感到暖和

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Posted: 2006-12-12 00:57:48 Post subject:

风停了，总会感到暖和感人单体总是孤独的很好地表现出来了 _________________ 写诗是为了写更好的诗

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Posted: 2006-12-12 02:04:42 Post subject:

问好　才女朋友　：））对女诗人，不能说老朋友，会犯忌的。。。一行人，像一群归雁散落在南国我的执着，透明如风《》动心。。。 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

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Posted: 2006-12-12 02:25:37 Post subject:

给楼主　发了一个欢迎贴 http://oson.ca/bbs/bmf/viewtopic.php?p=5177#5177 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

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Posted: 2006-12-12 18:10:53 Post subject: 谢谢老和和KOHKO.

好久没有来这里了,老和还好吗?? 谢谢老和和KOHKO评, 问好了.

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Posted: 2006-12-12 19:32:57 Post subject: Re: 谢谢老和和KOHKO.

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好久没有来这里了,老和还好吗??

谢谢老和和KOHKO评,
问好了.

很好,谢谢

又读了一遍
很有回味的感觉
Very Happy

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亘古清露儿
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Posted: 2006-12-12 19:37:59 Post subject:

kokho wrote:

给楼主　发了一个欢迎贴

http://oson.ca/bbs/bmf/viewtopic.php?p=5177#5177

再次感谢KOKHO的盛情.
问好

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Posted: 2006-12-12 22:11:06 Post subject:

静冰 wrote:

kokho wrote:

给楼主　发了一个欢迎贴

http://oson.ca/bbs/bmf/viewtopic.php?p=5177#5177

再次感谢KOKHO的盛情.
问好

As long as you are happy...

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Posted: 2006-12-12 23:10:19 Post subject:

I am very joyful,Thanks.Hoped you are also joyful.

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Posted: 2006-12-13 04:38:03 Post subject:

欢迎朋友。很好的临屏。有个别地方感觉不太明晰，比如：“我的执着，透明如风 ”，这句话意为：我的执著如风般透明，于是就很难理解了。另外“秋夜，排队上路 /目光如炬，想谱曲 ”。目光如炬放在这儿，似乎有所不妥。 _________________ 杯中冲浪.披履而行 http://blog.sina.com.cn/shoutao006

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Posted: 2006-12-13 08:43:47 Post subject:

我的执着，透明如风如冰

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Posted: 2006-12-13 11:03:01 Post subject:

静冰 wrote:

I am very joyful,Thanks.Hoped you are also joyful.

可以去欧洲了。。。学得好快；））

回来老板一定加薪！！！

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Posted: 2006-12-13 17:18:31 Post subject:

北方狼 wrote:

欢迎朋友。很好的临屏。有个别地方感觉不太明晰，比如：“我的执着，透明如风 ”，这句话意为：我的执著如风般透明，于是就很难理解了。另外“秋夜，排队上路 /目光如炬，想谱曲 ”。目光如炬放在这儿，似乎有所不妥。

很忠恳的,
全部收下了.
问好

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Posted: 2006-12-13 21:18:08 Post subject: 不错

总体感觉细腻,温和一眼看出是"女性"的文字

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Posted: 2006-12-14 17:42:06 Post subject:

好眼力, 不过下辈子我要做男滴.

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Posted: 2006-12-14 17:47:53 Post subject:

静冰 wrote:

好眼力,
不过下辈子我要做男滴.

全做男的, 恐怕不现实
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Posted: 2006-12-14 17:58:04 Post subject:

那你做女滴,偶做男滴,这样算平衡了吧.嘻嘻~~

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Posted: 2006-12-14 23:14:16 Post subject:

静冰 wrote:

那你做女滴,偶做男滴,这样算平衡了吧.嘻嘻~~ Smile

哈哈　和平岛　遇上克星　 Very Happy

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Posted: 2006-12-14 23:20:08 Post subject:

kokho wrote:

静冰 wrote:

那你做女滴,偶做男滴,这样算平衡了吧.嘻嘻~~ Smile

哈哈　和平岛　遇上克星　 Very Happy

．

kokho是一个很有娱乐精神的朋友
这样的朋友, 很难得呀
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