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冰清
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PostPosted: 2007-11-13 11:55:01    Post subject: 冬日在路上(1) Reply with quote

<冬日在路上(1)>

车流冬令天涯路,
暮色依微未寄家。
窗外嘻嘻雨和雪,
亲心何若吉云花?
*11月8日立冬,在路上,见窗外雨交雪。
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PostPosted: 2007-11-13 16:19:11    Post subject: Reply with quote

婉转优雅。
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PostPosted: 2007-11-13 16:42:26    Post subject: 回 Reply with quote

冰清老师即景好诗,拜读。但不太明白“吉云花”,望赐教。
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PostPosted: 2007-11-13 18:15:33    Post subject: Re: 回 Reply with quote

qinghongh wrote:
冰清老师即景好诗,拜读。但不太明白“吉云花”,望赐教。


我插一句嘴,不算赐教,只算简单注释,别见怪哈^_^

吉云花,传说中的奇花名。清孙枝蔚《木槿》诗:“老人已齐物,不羡吉云花。”注:“ 江湖长翁诗‘髩香长点吉云花’,自注云:‘吉云花千岁开一枝,出《神仙传》。’”
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PostPosted: 2007-11-13 18:30:22    Post subject: Reply with quote

再略微详细注释一下^_^

髩香长点吉云花出自宋陈造的诗《石湖生日致语口号》:
筹筵高敞老仙家,帘影中间五色霞。
碧酒旧须麟作脯,雕盘新荐枣如瓜。
玉壶缥缈非尘世,金狄依稀记岁华。
胜日年年欹醉帽,髩香长点吉云花。
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PostPosted: 2007-11-13 18:39:35    Post subject: Reply with quote

忍不住,都说出来,就算“狗肚子里存不住二两油”吧^_^

陈造(一一三三--一二○三),字唐卿,高邮(今属江苏)人。孝宗淳熙二年(一一七五)进士,调太平州繁昌尉。历平江府教授,知明州定海县,通判房州权知州事。房州秩满,为浙西路安抚司参议,改淮南西路安抚司参议。自以转辗州县幕僚,无补於世,置江湖乃宜,遂自号江湖长翁。宁宗嘉泰三年卒,年七十一。有《江湖长翁文集》四十卷,由子师刊刻行世,陆游为之序,已佚。明神宗万万四十六年(一六一八)仁和李之藻获抄本,与秦观集同刊于高邮。事见本集卷首序及元申屠駉《宋故淮南夫子陈公墓志铭》。陈造诗,以明李之藻刊本为底本。校以影印文渊阁《四库本书》本(简称四库本)等。诗集外的作品另编一卷。
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PostPosted: 2007-11-14 07:42:48    Post subject: Re: 冬日在路上 Reply with quote

冰清 wrote:
<冬日在路上>

车流冬令天涯路,
暮色依微未寄家。
窗外嘻嘻雨和雪,
亲心何若吉云花?
*11月8日立冬,在路上,见窗外雨交雪。


步韵奉和[1]

秃树寒风日早斜,
严冬季换报千家。
犹思燕舞莺啼柳,
骋目天涯六出花。

注:六出花指雪花,因雪花呈六角形,故以六出称之。唐、高骈 《对雪》:“六出飞花入户时,坐看青竹变琼枝”。
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PostPosted: 2007-11-14 13:37:06    Post subject: 远游归来 Reply with quote

冰清 wrote:
<冬日在路上>

车流冬令天涯路,
暮色依微未寄家。
窗外嘻嘻雨和雪,
亲心何若吉云花?
*11月8日立冬,在路上,见窗外雨交雪。

步韵奉和[2]

梯航景致遗心影,
挥别风尘已到家。
夜里烘炉吹暖气,
醒来百里吉云花。
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PostPosted: 2007-11-14 14:31:52    Post subject: Reply with quote

好诗, 好和, 好注解. Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2007-11-14 16:06:38    Post subject: Reply with quote

欣赏注解与和诗 Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2007-11-14 18:16:01    Post subject: Reply with quote

各位好诗佳注,本人也凑个热闹,和了一首,另发,祈正!
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PostPosted: 2007-11-14 19:07:28    Post subject: Reply with quote

征尘载袖 wrote:
忍不住,都说出来,就算“狗肚子里存不住二两油”吧^_^

陈造(一一三三--一二○三),字唐卿,高邮(今属江苏)人。孝宗淳熙二年(一一七五)进士,调太平州繁昌尉。历平江府教授,知明州定海县,通判房州权知州事。房州秩满,为浙西路安抚司参议,改淮南西路安抚司参议。自以转辗州县幕僚,无补於世,置江湖乃宜,遂自号江湖长翁。宁宗嘉泰三年卒,年七十一。有《江湖长翁文集》四十卷,由子师刊刻行世,陆游为之序,已佚。明神宗万万四十六年(一六一八)仁和李之藻获抄本,与秦观集同刊于高邮。事见本集卷首序及元申屠駉《宋故淮南夫子陈公墓志铭》。陈造诗,以明李之藻刊本为底本。校以影印文渊阁《四库本书》本(简称四库本)等。诗集外的作品另编一卷。

谢载袖MM指点。MM博学多才,令人佩服。冒昧问一下,载袖MM的笔名很特别,可有什么出处?
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PostPosted: 2007-11-15 00:58:05    Post subject: Reply with quote

拆字谜格赠冰清
文/ 山城子

什么冷凝疑不见?
喜看一水在眼前。
溪里无奚颜色美,
青山之青伴潺潺。

2007-11-14夜临屏
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PostPosted: 2007-11-15 09:09:54    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢莹雪、qinghongh、袖袖、闻山、白水、楚人、山城子等老师和朋友。电脑经常不work ,无奈!
多想向朋友们道声谢谢,说说我的感动啊!
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PostPosted: 2007-11-15 09:14:33    Post subject: Reply with quote

征尘载袖 wrote:
忍不住,都说出来,就算“狗肚子里存不住二两油”吧^_^

陈造(一一三三--一二○三),字唐卿,高邮(今属江苏)人。孝宗淳熙二年(一一七五)进士,调太平州繁昌尉。历平江府教授,知明州定海县,通判房州权知州事。房州秩满,为浙西路安抚司参议,改淮南西路安抚司参议。自以转辗州县幕僚,无补於世,置江湖乃宜,遂自号江湖长翁。宁宗嘉泰三年卒,年七十一。有《江湖长翁文集》四十卷,由子师刊刻行世,陆游为之序,已佚。明神宗万万四十六年(一六一八)仁和李之藻获抄本,与秦观集同刊于高邮。事见本集卷首序及元申屠駉《宋故淮南夫子陈公墓志铭》。陈造诗,以明李之藻刊本为底本。校以影印文渊阁《四库本书》本(简称四库本)等。诗集外的作品另编一卷。


天生一个乐天派,
载舞载歌笑酒窝。
袖里藏金千百锭,
朝朝挥洒谢谁何?

谢阿哥!Laughing Laughing
袖,代问家兄好!
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PostPosted: 2007-11-15 09:19:53    Post subject: Reply with quote

白水 Moonlight wrote:
好诗, 好和, 好注解. Very Happy


白水,好诗是你给的!立冬那天,短暂的会面多惬意!
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PostPosted: 2007-11-15 10:56:04    Post subject: Reply with quote

冰清 wrote:
白水 Moonlight wrote:
好诗, 好和, 好注解. Very Happy


白水,好诗是你给的!立冬那天,短暂的会面多惬意!


真是给我的, 好喜欢. Very Happy
看看这个 Razz
http://oson.ca/viewtopic.php?t=9346
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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 06:23:33    Post subject: Re: 冬日在路上 Reply with quote

冰清 wrote:
<冬日在路上>

车流冬令天涯路,
暮色依微未寄家。
窗外嘻嘻雨和雪,
亲心何若吉云花?
*11月8日立冬,在路上,见窗外雨交雪。


和冰清《冬日在路上》

枫国初冬六出花,
潇湘依旧日飞霞,
麓山层橘多红浪,
遥寄一枝到海涯。
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PostPosted: 2007-11-17 23:16:57    Post subject: Re: 冬日在路上 Reply with quote

老山 wrote:
冰清 wrote:
<冬日在路上>

车流冬令天涯路,
暮色依微未寄家。
窗外嘻嘻雨和雪,
亲心何若吉云花?
*11月8日立冬,在路上,见窗外雨交雪。


和冰清《冬日在路上》

枫国初冬六出花,
潇湘依旧日飞霞,
麓山层橘多红浪,
遥寄一枝到海涯。


麓山层橘多红浪

Laughing 我馋!
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PostPosted: 2007-11-24 18:50:30    Post subject: < 冬日在路上(2)> Reply with quote

<立冬遇雪寄思>

立冬. 路上, 想起儿时见到的一幕.

泥腿忽忽寒簟卧,
裤单衣冷又临冬.
红楼把酒声声里,
可见无言风雨中?

*"三九补一冬,来年无病痛".立冬,冬季的第一个节气,故立冬进补成为中国数千年的习俗。
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