顾小花
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 Posted: 2007-10-12 00:48:13 Post subject: 解 脱 |
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纠 缠
再次提起一片水域
天空，就掠进了晚秋
风的那一端，滑向落木的边缘
我是倒下去的季节，扶不起绿
还有雨水要来，那些
无根的思想，习惯了逃离阳光
散布着另一种灵魂
河流的外衣，脱给无家可归的人
此刻，我和一面镜子保持距离
远方，已经向更远方撤退
没有了最后的机会，不清楚
风和尘，到底谁撕碎了谁
解 脱
今晚，我要整理一些月光
让所有的水，穿过十月的瞳孔
岸边不要停船
只是，芦苇还在摇摆
我是泅渡的人，两手空空
去年数过的星星不再出现
黑夜还在怀里，没了喋喋不休
天空从腹部悄然打开
这个季节适合放逐
远去的花朵没有留下颜色
文字苍白，泛着柔弱的香味
去和留，都是一种幸福 |
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杯中冲浪
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jemmy
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半溪明月
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| Posted: 2007-10-12 06:06:45 Post subject: |
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| 欣赏～ |
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顾小花
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| Posted: 2007-10-13 18:59:50 Post subject: |
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谢谢朋友支持．问候秋安．
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nobody
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| Posted: 2007-10-13 19:43:12 Post subject: |
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very nice ones. sorry my computer is having a problem, can't type chinese. 
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顾小花
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| Posted: 2007-10-13 20:02:40 Post subject: |
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| nobody wrote: |
| very nice ones. sorry my computer is having a problem, can't type chinese. |
Thank you very much.I wish that your computer will come back exuberance soon. |
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nobody
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| Posted: 2007-10-13 20:07:03 Post subject: |
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谢谢小花，刚才搞了一下，现在好了。再说一遍，很好的诗，印象深刻。多来看看。
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赵福治
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| Posted: 2007-10-14 01:09:05 Post subject: |
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再次提起一片水域
天空，就掠进了晚秋
风的那一端，滑向落木的边缘
我是倒下去的季节，扶不起绿
。。。。。诗歌是一种状态，关键看怎样化为文字表达出来，读你的作品，内心不觉打动。这是感悟的提炼和状态的体验的外延的作品，提。 |
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雨中垂钓人
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| Posted: 2007-10-15 09:54:12 Post subject: |
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| 偶尔走过你的身边，感觉到新鲜的气息。看了你的数篇，原来就是那么有才。 |
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白水
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| Posted: 2007-10-15 17:08:23 Post subject: |
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| 的确不错, 提. |
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韩少君
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| Posted: 2007-10-17 11:36:01 Post subject: |
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相当不错!再提!
感觉和语言都是诗歌状态------
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迪拜
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| Posted: 2007-10-17 18:21:58 Post subject: |
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<解脱>
不错 |
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顾小花
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| Posted: 2007-10-18 21:52:54 Post subject: |
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谢谢朋友们关注.问候重阳!
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赵福治
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| Posted: 2007-10-29 23:07:31 Post subject: |
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| 诗歌是一种状态，关键看怎样化为文字表达出来，读你的作品，内心不觉打动。这是感悟的提炼和状态的体验的外延的作品，提。 |
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顾小花
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| Posted: 2007-11-01 15:18:27 Post subject: |
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谢谢赵老师关注,谢谢你的鼓励,小草会继续努力的.
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千里
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| Posted: 2007-11-02 10:18:08 Post subject: |
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| 赵福治 wrote: |
| 诗歌是一种状态，关键看怎样化为文字表达出来，读你的作品，内心不觉打动。这是感悟的提炼和状态的体验的外延的作品，提。 |
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