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鹧鸪天（二首）；长相思；五绝；忆秦娥；采桑子；浪淘沙令；宴清都；荷叶铺水面^_^

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Posted: 2007-09-21 05:37:34 Post subject: 鹧鸪天（二首）；长相思；五绝；忆秦娥；采桑子；浪淘沙令；宴清都；荷叶铺水面^_^

鹧鸪天万种清愁万种人，何人眉宇总含颦。挤来双泪空余怅，付与温巢好个真。琴懒拨，步慵巡，此情谁信索流芬。高楼远目临风织，微展柔肠酒共君。 _________________

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Posted: 2007-09-21 18:17:15 Post subject:

万种清愁万种人，何人眉宇总含颦。好句，赞一个！

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Posted: 2007-09-21 18:23:35 Post subject:

万种清愁万种人，黛玉眉宇总含颦。

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Posted: 2007-09-21 19:16:22 Post subject:

词意婉转。

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Posted: 2007-09-21 19:37:27 Post subject:

这么伤感．呵呵呵呵．不过句子很喜欢．婉约。 _________________ http://blog.sina.com.cn/axrq用寂寞谱写最美的舞曲~

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Posted: 2007-09-21 19:43:00 Post subject: Re: 鹧鸪天^_^

征尘载袖 wrote:

鹧鸪天

万种清愁万种人，何人眉宇总含颦。挤来双泪空余怅，付与温巢好个真。
琴懒拨，步慵巡，此情谁信索流芬。高楼远目临风织，微展柔肠酒共君。

MM, 好喜欢这句." 琴懒拨，步慵巡，"只是有点为总是欢乐的MM担心了. 但愿仅为创作.

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Posted: 2007-09-22 04:20:44 Post subject:

谢谢大家赏评！白水姐姐，我不愁，真的没愁（请参阅挤来双泪空余怅和此情谁信索流芬两句）^_^ _________________

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Posted: 2007-09-22 04:22:51 Post subject:

鹧鸪天舞约轻盈曲向阑，冰壶莹影入杯寒。墨台诗意宵如昼，玉指琴音月似年。风掠地，水呼天，白云来往载游仙。深斟浅饮何须劝，堆积多情掩醉颜。 _________________

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Posted: 2007-09-23 19:17:36 Post subject:

征尘载袖 wrote:

谢谢大家赏评！

白水姐姐，我不愁，真的没愁（请参阅挤来双泪空余怅和此情谁信索流芬两句）^_^

MM, 不愁就好.

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Posted: 2007-09-23 19:19:46 Post subject:

征尘载袖 wrote:

鹧鸪天

舞约轻盈曲向阑，冰壶莹影入杯寒。墨台诗意宵如昼，玉指琴音月似年。
风掠地，水呼天，白云来往载游仙。深斟浅饮何须劝，堆积多情掩醉颜。

深斟浅饮何须劝，堆积多情掩醉颜
很喜欢这两句, 写活了.

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Posted: 2007-09-24 06:21:39 Post subject:

姐姐，我的这首《鹧鸪天》算是读贴有感吧^_^ _________________

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Posted: 2007-09-28 10:32:42 Post subject:

长相思吟彩鸾，咏小娟。秋镜云埋秋饼圆，仙姿捧露盘。惆将缘，怅相悬。衣薄风侵袖袖寒，霜栖休说阑。 _________________

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Posted: 2007-09-29 07:30:57 Post subject:

五绝灵猫多灌水，长是柳弯眉。有罪何为过，舒肢小桶垂。 _________________

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Posted: 2007-10-12 06:03:22 Post subject:

忆秦娥总凝痴，妙歌新调三更时。传觞欢适，袖舞神驰。清愁付与谁人思？青衫贮泪成虚挥。何须有醉，红叶临枝。 _________________

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Posted: 2007-10-12 06:04:40 Post subject:

采桑子闲居未赋秋光瑟，画扇轻摇；画扇轻摇，巧小金莲节点翘。鸡皮疙瘩连成片，烟锁眉梢；烟锁眉梢，呻引莺喉分外娇。 _________________

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采桑子

闲居未赋秋光瑟，画扇轻摇；画扇轻摇，巧小金莲节点翘。
鸡皮疙瘩连成片，烟锁眉梢；烟锁眉梢，呻引莺喉分外娇。

闲居未赋秋光瑟
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袖袖丹心!

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谢谢冰清老师^_^ _________________

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Posted: 2007-10-14 20:18:11 Post subject:

浪淘沙令人静夜方长，劳损柔肠，秋风夺叶又轻狂。散了几回云又雨，阁冷帷凉。凤索挽双双，多少思量？写成香泪卧孤光。烟染露裁留望眼，山影林篁。 _________________

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