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风 境(组诗)
赵雅君
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PostPosted: 2007-09-05 21:15:32    Post subject: 风 境(组诗) Reply with quote

风 境(组诗)

吉林 赵雅君

⊙听 风

养一群蚂蚁在血液里
它们搬家,顺便提醒我
躲进楼台亭榭
或者庙宇

唤几条土蛇在脚下蜿蜒
说出谚语,天空就倾斜了
向花蕾撕裂的伤口
倒出宁静

俯身山雨欲来的国画
我面向大海
装卸满耳云涛,至今
还没有你悄悄登陆的消息

⊙看 风

贝多芬的《命运》交响曲
逃出乐池,漫向大海
制作浪的标本夹在书中
我把日子翻到序言

足音踏踏
携一场暴雨而至,淹没
轻敲窗楣的花香

读肩胛上起伏的马蹄
端起案头的茶杯
饮下山色,心头便急速掠过
一朵云投下的
刀光剑影

⊙追 风

追到早春二月
不见那个心灵手巧的比喻
只见一段剪下的柳枝
我拿它当作鞭子,抽打云影
寻找旧年丢失的枣红马
追到六月,我的目标
一半被鹰隼抱向天空,一半滚落山崖

追到九月,遇见沙漠
和一个寻找绿野萍踪的人
我把我的鞭子插进了黄沙

⊙捕 风

我不网开的这面
偷度者来自
天气预报说的西伯利亚
越过我的边境,入草木籍
把一场大雪挥动成扫帚
清除野餐的气味
和狐狸尾巴上粘有的少许花香

我跟踪它们
向它们追讨袅袅炊烟
和童年被偷的一块尿布
把捉住的呼号
装进空了三十年的蝈蝈笼子
经过解冻的水面
还给母亲一面没有皱纹的镜子

我拿被撕碎的旗帜
喂养它们
直到它们有力气举起
种子丢失的梦,或者呼吸

2007.9.5
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杨海军
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Joined: 01 Mar 2007
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Location: 吉林
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PostPosted: 2007-09-05 22:35:12    Post subject: Reply with quote

喜欢诗人的风格及语言!!海军祝好!!!
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走了很久了。还清晰地望见/身后那盏明灭的灯火/好像我们走的越久越远/故乡的那盏灯就越亮
——拙作《离开村庄》
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下一个偶像是野兽
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Joined: 16 Jan 2007
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Location: 西安
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PostPosted: 2007-09-06 07:52:49    Post subject: Reply with quote

我拿被撕碎的旗帜
喂养它们
直到它们有力气举起
种子丢失的梦,或者呼吸
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喜欢这段。问好
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kokho
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PostPosted: 2007-09-06 15:08:47    Post subject: Reply with quote

简短有力 :) 问好。。

。。。。。

发了诗歌,也给其他朋友们回回帖哟。。


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乒乓、摄影、诗歌
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爱松
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PostPosted: 2007-09-06 17:02:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

语言简练!
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郭野曦
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Joined: 07 Sep 2007
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PostPosted: 2007-09-07 01:28:26    Post subject: Reply with quote

好诗,拜读了,顶!
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赵雅君
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PostPosted: 2007-09-08 06:57:43    Post subject: Reply with quote

杨海军 wrote:
喜欢诗人的风格及语言!!海军祝好!!!


问候海军:)
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赵雅君
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PostPosted: 2007-09-08 06:58:36    Post subject: Reply with quote

下一个偶像是野兽 wrote:
我拿被撕碎的旗帜
喂养它们
直到它们有力气举起
种子丢失的梦,或者呼吸
-----------------------------
喜欢这段。问好


就喜欢一段?可以了,可以了,呵呵,问好!
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赵雅君
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PostPosted: 2007-09-08 07:01:15    Post subject: Reply with quote

kokho wrote:
简短有力 :) 问好。。

。。。。。

发了诗歌,也给其他朋友们回回帖哟。。



谢阅评。是呀,不回帖自己的帖子人气也上不来,找时间也回回吧,尤其要学习学习精华帖:)
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赵雅君
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PostPosted: 2007-09-08 07:02:02    Post subject: Reply with quote

爱松 wrote:
语言简练!


问候爱松,感谢你阅评了:)
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赵雅君
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PostPosted: 2007-09-08 07:05:08    Post subject: Reply with quote

郭野曦 wrote:
好诗,拜读了,顶!


感谢野曦的鼓励,问好!
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白水
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PostPosted: 2007-09-08 07:13:10    Post subject: Reply with quote

感觉不错, 更喜欢第一首.
感觉有些文字还可敛. 比如"贝多芬的《命运》交响曲", 个人以为"《命运》交响曲" 已足够了. 己见, 不妥见谅 Embarassed
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